Hi @annannbecks-co – the ‘reclaim yourself’ subtitle doesn’t resonate with me. It feels murky. I’m not sure what that means. Can you use different wording there? I like the rest of it. The title feels clear and I like that different levels of assessment will lead to different suggestions/outcomes.

Reverse your path to Burnout: Get clarity on your ONE next step to reclaim yourself.

i like the title because it reminds me of what could happen…but I agree with sara about the word reclaim. how about changing it to protect?

Welcome!

welcome! i am a newbie too. Hope you are getting some sleep

Hi @antheadreamteamconsulting-ca – I like it! Is there something specific you would like feedback on?

I like how you tied this month’s theme of your past experience so well to an event. Good invitation email. Another engagement question you could ask is: How has your past experiences influenced who you are today a business owner? Reply and tell me your story.

this sounds so inviting

Great story! Maybe also tie in that retaining people and retraining can also be better for a business bottom line than throwing the baby out with the bathwater.

This is such a good story. If you added anything about how much people save to retain VS fire, that could be a quick line OR a whole new thought reversal piece.

I think this is mostly there overall – I just want to ask – (because I am learning) is the ‘thought reversal’ clear enough? You USED to be the CEO and then needed to focus on your daughter and to your SURPRISE – the business grew – but WHY & HOW – I “think” needs to be addressed – so people can understand how you can help them.

what is WLPM? I think you need to just say it – work less, profit more because you are diving into another acronym with GROW.

Can you tie this back to toilets? After all, you started your business for freedom, even if you are not the one currently cleaning the toilets like I was! Let’s partner together and build your self-running business engine.

such an impactful story

I like the parallels you draw from kids acting out and our pets acting out. I can feel you passion for help those pet parents. As for your questions about pictures, do you have any before and after pictures? Or a picture of a “helped” pet? I might even include a before and after story of a pet and parent that you helped. That might actually work…Read More

Love this copy and it is so relatable to readers (even those of us who don’t have children). It just makes sense. Well done!

Hi there – thought I would offer some insights that my sister (a 35+ year veterinarian) used to say about pets & kids….. If the kids walked thru the door and were ill mannered i.e. running all over the place, touching everything — then the pets would act similarly! And of course, vice versa was true — if the kids came into the clinic and were…Read More

Your passion and deterination to figure out how to help your daughter definitely translates into your passion for helping your clients, and your interest in getting to know them and their needs so you can best support them too. I loved these lines: I understand your frustration if your programs are all over the…Read More

I love this – SO relatable! Great job on the content and drawing the parallels. Well done. I know your subject line scored high, but it’s best to have 3-5 words max in subject and preview lines. Might want to reconsider that?

Great!!!

You can sign up for things in Joyful Business revolution and then you get a sequence = there are a few and it will give you a sense in how to craft – or sign up for a copywriter you like and see what they do – or someone in a similar field as yourself and see theirs. That’s how I am thinking about it – will be doing myself soon