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    Jennifer Jane Young

    • 3 months, 1 week ago

    Hi ladies. I just watched the replay of the “Transformation Statement To Book Sales Calls” and I wrote out one email. I would love some feedback before I do the 3 others to make sure I’m on the right track @amymshannonhernandez-com @clientsmshannonhernandez-com and community 🙂

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    Hi FNAME,

    If you are not trusting yourself to say yes to…Read More

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    Jennifer Jane Young

    • 3 months, 1 week ago

    Hi everyone. I just worked on my “I Help” statement and would love some feedback. Per Shannon’s guidance on the training recording, I created it for this specific 1:1 coaching offer I have:

    The Intuitive Incubator

    Here it goes: I help people find the courage to trust their gut and heal what is keeping them…Read More

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      AmyHager
      3 months, 1 week ago

      Always post here, this is our safe community to play in 💜

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      AmyHager
      3 months, 1 week ago

      This seems really big and is hard for people to grasp on to. “create the change and results they desire”
      When you think about your most ideal clients, is there a change or something similar that they all had? For example, our best clients for Joy Fueled are ones who are grown their business with some coaching and support and value the knowledge…Read More

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        Jennifer Jane Young
        3 months, 1 week ago

        Hi @amymshannonhernandez-com Thanks for this. I have a tendancy of being vague and too inclusive lol in my marketing. I guess my best clients have left their corporate/traditional lives to launch their business and own their purpose. I tend to attrack empathic entrepreneurs who don’t trust themselves and are overwhelmed with all they feel they…Read More

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          AmyHager
          3 months, 1 week ago

          can you take what you dump from your heart and plug it into this framework and the other post you made? When you try to be overly inclusive in your messaging – it doesn’t work. You want someone to feel like you a speaking directly to their heart.

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      Jennifer Jane Young
      3 months, 1 week ago

      @amymshannonhernandez-com I think I just had a massive insight tonight. In the last few months it’s become clear that I attract Highly Sensitive Empaths (like me) and when I did the exercise for the Bold Qualifier, the clients were all Empaths.

      Then tonight, I was sitting down journaling in The Desire Map writing out my gratitude list for…Read More

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    Jennifer Jane Young

    • 3 months, 1 week ago

    Hi ladies. I’m so thrilled to finally be here with you all. A big thank you to @clientsmshannonhernandez-com and @amymshannonhernandez-com for gently nurturing me into this space and a BIG thank you to @jaini-shah15gmail-com for helping me on my healing journey to get ready to start this work.

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    KathyTarbell

    • 3 months, 4 weeks ago

    After our session today I basically scrapped my 1st email. Thank you Shannon for getting real on beliefs! I was trying to call BS but part of the BS is using language I don’t like, makes me cringe and is counter to what I want to promote… So here is another draft 🙂

    I really dislike the word sexy. Although I am in an industry that uses it…Read More

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    KathyTarbell

    • 4 months ago

    HI All- Here is my second BS email. I am trying to get a nice bank of them. Is the BS a strong enough? and my reply coherent?
    **Photographers promise to edit your pictures so that you look like a supermodel

    Do you want your pictures to look like you or Cindy Crawford? Cindy is one of a kind and looks like Cindy. I believe that you deserve to…Read More

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    Jaini Shah

    • 4 months ago

    Hi everyone! Sorry for being a bit quiet for the last few weeks, its been a travel month! Watched the October Replay and here is my first draft of a debunking BS email. Is it clear on what the BS? And do you feel I am bringing out my expertise enough?

    Subject line: Work out so you can Eat
    Preview: That’s a LIE!

    Hi NAME,

    Did you know that…Read More

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    KathyTarbell

    • 4 months ago

    Here is my first try at BS debunking- As always my first question does it make sense? To much, not enough???

    Subject line-Pics have to be sexy

    Hello….,
    You don’t need to know how to look sexy. Practice your smile or pouty face and be flawless. I believe that everyone has different ideas of what sexy is and I want you to be c…Read More

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    Kim Romain

    • 4 months ago

    Here’s email #1 from the BS debunking session. Would love feedback!

    All of the coaches, courses, books, podcasts you’ve been investing your time and money on to shift your mindset aren’t helping you uplevel yourself or the impact you’re making on the world.

    OOF. That stings, doesn’t it.

    So, what does create that uplevel in your life an…Read More

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      KathyTarbell
      4 months ago

      Hi KIm- You might consider I believe in front of “As many coaches…” The 2 paragraphs on your qualifications as an expert are great. But then the email goes into all the details of the offer and the message gets lost as it makes it very long. Hope this helps 🙂

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      AmyHager
      4 months ago

      opening line needs to change from: All of the coaches, courses, books, podcasts you’ve been investing your time and money on to shift your mindset aren’t helping you uplevel yourself or the impact you’re making on the world.
      to: All of the coaches, courses, books, podcasts you’ve been investing your time and money on to shift your mindset aren’t…Read More

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      AmyHager
      4 months ago

      rework: From my time on the front lines to working with hundreds of leaders, teams, and organizations over the past 7 years, I know without a doubt that mindset is a component of change.
      TO: I know without a doubt that mindset is a component of change.
      (you estabilsh your expertise in the 25 years line and paragraph above. Say what is.)

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        Kim Romain
        4 months ago

        Gotcha. Thank you both. Here’s my reworked copy. Any additional thoughts?

        All of the coaches, courses, books, podcasts you’ve been investing your time and money on to shift your mindset aren’t helping you uplevel yourself and the impact that you’re making on the world.

        OOF. That stings, doesn’t it.

        So, what does create that uplevel in your…Read More

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    MariaHernandez

    • 4 months ago

    Hi y’all! I’ve been keeping a close eye on the WordPress “situation” that’s been ongoing for the past few weeks. Matt Mullenweg, the CEO of Automattic (the company behind wordpress.com and woocommerce, among other things), has been publicly battling with WP Engine, another “premium” host that competes directly with wordpress.com. As part of this…Read More

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