Community Forum – Content Personality Club

KathyTarbell

• 6 months, 2 weeks ago

Any feed back would be great- is it compelling? CTA in line with the content? More or Less “story”?
Email # 2
Subject line: She stood in the storm
And when the wind did not blow her away she adjusted her sails

Gosh let me tell you when I picked up a camera again after not touching one for 20 years was it different! No film, lots of…Read More

5 Comments
- Annette Presley
  6 months, 1 week ago
  
  You have a lot of beautiful pieces in here, but it feels disjointed and the CTA came as a bit of a shock. I just didn’t see it heading there.
  
  If a retreat is what you are offering, I would use the “she stood in the storm” story for something else and create a story around “you are the definition of beauty.” What does that mean and look like and…Read More
  - KathyTarbell
    6 months, 1 week ago
    
    Thank you!
- Shannon
  6 months, 1 week ago
  
  @annettepresleyhotmail-com great job on the input around making the opening lines – which I LOVE – match the offer, which is the retreat. @kathymthoodphotography-com there seems to be a diconnect here. Maybe a tie in to how a retreat can help you expand your sails? reset after internal storms?
  - KathyTarbell
    6 months, 1 week ago
    
    Thank you ladies! I will work on it some more 🙂
- Dan Lewis
  6 months ago
  
  I agree it feels kind of disjointed. You have the sentence, “Work that revolves around, empowering, uplifting, encouraging, getting curious, learning and showing each and every woman that “You are the definition of Beauty”.” Perhaps focusing on one of these things could provide a theme that ties the story to the call to action?
Veronica (Vee) Drake

• 6 months, 2 weeks ago

The School of Spiritual Arts is the most creative, fun way to discover your life’s purpose organically

6 Comments
- Shannon
  6 months, 1 week ago
  
  @vdrake123gmail-com we need a vehicle up front (Intuition), not the name of the school/program
  - Veronica (Vee) Drake
    6 months, 1 week ago
    
    Evolve Workshops –
    - Dan Lewis
      6 months ago
      
      Or a playshop . . .
      
      Veronica (Vee) Drake
      6 months ago
      
      LOVE THAT!!!!!!!!!!!! wanna teach one??
      
      Dan Lewis
      6 months ago
      
      Let’s talk!
      
      Dan Lewis
      6 months ago
      
      Feel free to schedule a time on my calendar: https://calendly.com/badassity/consultation
AmyHager

• 6 months, 2 weeks ago

Great work this week, everyone! For those of you who are ready to promote your lead magnet more to grow your list after completing the experiment that we set for you this week… Here are my top 3 themes that you can watch the 1st session and come here to post your draft messaging and get feedback from your community. Remember, when you post here…Read More

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- Blair Hope
  6 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Thanks for this inspiration, Amy! I am going to use what clients do wrong, because I mention that in my lead magnet and it also addresses how NOT to do that!
- Dan Lewis
  6 months ago
  
  Thanks, Amy!
Blair Hope

• 6 months, 2 weeks ago

Hi! I finally have my Lead Converstion Tool finished – Get To The Vet With Less Stress – and I”d love feedback. Video is my content personality so I included video. Here is the link:

My target audience are Pet Moms (and Dads are welcome, my focus is just usually Moms because the energy is often…Read More

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- AmyHager
  6 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  This is so clear and such a focused pain point. Good clarity, Blair
  - Blair Hope
    6 months, 2 weeks ago
    
    Thank you!
AmyHager

• 6 months, 2 weeks ago

Reminder: We kick off our list-building challenge today at 2pm ET. You needed to add your name to the list to get the zoom and workbook. If you didn’t do that, please go here before 1pm ET: code CPLAB97 at this link here:

[Content Personality Lab #2] Payment
KathyTarbell

• 6 months, 3 weeks ago

HI All- I am so excited to be a part of the group. I found that peer reviews, suggestions and input can be priceless.
Here is what I have come up with after listening to last weeks lesson and being a part of today’s.

Please comment on my email tag line is it compelling you to open the email?
Does the story resonate and have impact?
Is my…Read More

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- Jaini Shah
  6 months, 3 weeks ago
  
  Really like the subject line, often we shy away from pain. And the story is wonderful. The line that the photo shoot was her reset point really resonated with me. For the first line of the email, perhaps look at how to make the first sentence more about the emotion than the fact that you had a meeting. Shooting in the dark but something like I was…Read More
  - KathyTarbell
    6 months, 2 weeks ago
    
    thanks!
- AmyHager
  6 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Can you tie this back to the story? These questions are all very vague (but I do want to say… a good start) I know you can bring this together.
  What would you want your photo shoot to include? Is there a theme you like? An outfit that is the bomb? A fantasy look that you want to explore? Reply to this email and share with me. I love to hear and…Read More
  - KathyTarbell
    6 months, 2 weeks ago
    
    Thank you! Will work on it some more 🙂
- Blair Hope
  6 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Your subject line would get me to open your email!
  - KathyTarbell
    6 months, 2 weeks ago
    
    Thanks!
Lisa Johns

• 6 months, 3 weeks ago

So great to be with you all today – great interactions and love the feedback and support

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Jaini Shah

• 6 months, 3 weeks ago

Email Number 4- Does this email speak to those looking to change their health and is it clear that if they sign up for the Masterclass they will have the answers to better health? @amymshannonhernandez-com @clientsmshannonhernandez-com

Subject Line: Do Holidays mean Overeating?
Preview: Is it possible to enjoy a holiday where it isn’t all…Read More

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- KathyTarbell
  6 months, 3 weeks ago
  
  I think that it is somewhat clear on what the masterclass covers. You might consider taking out the second to last paragraph ( Are you clear….) Clear is used quite a bit at the end of the email you may want to use some other words.
  - Jaini Shah
    6 months, 3 weeks ago
    
    Thank you! Good point, clear is there a lot, I’ll edit that part 🙂
- Shannon
  6 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Hi @jaini-shah15gmail-com – love this take on holidays and over eating. Can you include in the last paragraph a bulleted list of the 3 takeaways from the workshop?
Jaini Shah

• 6 months, 3 weeks ago

Email Number 3- if you read this email, would you want to know more about what food to eat and avoid? Hoping to get some discovery calls booked! @amymshannonhernandez-com @clientsmshannonhernandez-com

Subject Line: Does it rot?
Preview: How do you know if food is real?

Hook Line: Something weird happened, I bought a croissant and decided…Read More

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- AmyHager
  6 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Don’t add fluff to the hook line
  Hook Line: Something weird happened, I bought a croissant and decided not to eat it, and then A YEAR LATER- the croissant is still here 😷😷
  
  Get straight to it: I bought a croissant and decided not to eat it, and then A YEAR LATER- the croissant is still here
  - Shannon
    6 months, 2 weeks ago
    
    agreed! less words = more clarity (in cases like this)
Jaini Shah

• 6 months, 3 weeks ago

Email Number 2- Please share your thoughts- Does this email make you feel curious about your hunger needs? And get you thinking, do I want to reassess my relationship with food?

Subject Line: Hunger isn’t about food 😱😱
Preview: I was recently proven right about this, you can be full and lose weight!

Hook Line: Hunger is 99% NEVER about the…Read More

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- Shannon
  6 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  I LOVE this piece – and the opening line. and the story! Well done @jaini-shah15gmail-com. Remember, subject lines and preview lines need to be 5 words or less – so you need to rethink this long preview line.
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