Hey Kathy! I feel like there’s more than one email here. The excitement (new year, ski races, being in the studio). The managerial outcomes/goals feels like something else. What would it be like to stay with the excitement as the vibe for this email? Maybe tell us more about the joy, fear, excitement, danger of the ski racing. What’s it been like as a grandmother watching them grow into it? I’m super curious and feeling excited about what you started to share there. I also feel like wanderlust could be its own email, too. Didn’t feel totally connected.

I agree with Kim. I don’t follow a thread from the ski experiences to your past jobs to what you do now. I think this is a good start and it just needs to be fleshed out more so that A leads to B leads to C.

Ditto. The title makes me feel like the message is going to be about the desire to travel without a plan or explore just because or something like that, or with the skiing, I think of wanderlust as a skier being on the top of a mountain just to go where the snow leads kind of thing, not being in a race where you have to follow a certain path, so I’m not sure wanderlust is the right title.

I also had trouble connecting the skiing with the previous jobs, to taking photos.

But you end with vibe, so maybe that needs to be the starting point. What experience have you had with vibe, whether it was in a job, or raising kids/grandkids (each kid has a different vibe). Where did you learn about vibe and how has that made you a better photographer or able to capture the uniqueness of each person?

Maybe a starting point is something like: when you see a picture of yourself, does it feel like you are looking at a stranger? Or tired of not seeing your true self in your pictures? Want to recognize yourself in your pictures?

I agree with what’s been said above. I think there are 2 emails here. I absolutely love how you have tied the vibe of the skiing races to what you experience in a photo shoot. And perhaps that works when you remove the sentence “As a manager it was my job to look at things from everyone’s point of view and help facilitate the outcomes of the goals we had set.” So one email is all about the vibe and the experience you provide in a photo shoot. And then a second email is based around your experience as a manager and how that helps you provide the best photoshoot experience to your clients?