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Great meeting today! Here are the links of examples that Brea shared with us today + @diana-lidstonegmail-com‘s…Read More
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Is anyone planning to join me Thursday at noon ET for the 4 Th Wednesday Community Cooperation Meeting? Some of you mentioned that they had a time conflict. I could also host it at 10:30 AM or 3:30 PM.
Time: Aug 24, 2022 12:00 Eastern Time (US and Canada)
Every month on the Fourth Wed, 4 occurrence(s)
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I’m trying to get better at coming to this community, I’ll work on it! I would love some feedback on my story, I’m not sure how the tension and relief flows, how compelling it is, or if the CTA is too complicated. This is my 2nd draft after Tanya helped me rework a few things. Thanks!
The year was 2013 and I was at my heaviest weight ever, and…Read More
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I feel like you are missing something…. are you your ideal weight now? did you find that something you were looking for in the last round of experimentation?
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Stephanie,
once again, nice job, I think you are pretty much on-target.I would open a little different, edit a few other places, and add a little more detail to give people a stronger feeling about what your struggles.My journey to learning how to lose weight joyfully began n 2013. I was at my heaviest weight ever, and officially obese.
When I…Read More
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Some different ideas for some of the sentences:
It took me 6 whole years to lose just 40 lbs.
I lost 40 lbs in only 4 months! I was so excited and on top of that I managed to keep the weight off for an entire year.But then I gained back 12 lbs. What I was doing to lose weight wasn’t helping me keep the weight off. I needed to try something…Read More
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Love the version you published
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Good Afternoon friends! I’ve posted my long form and a link to the video for how the Revenue PI came to be.
Hey Hey! My name is Tanya, and today I wanted to introduce myself and tell you the story of how The Revenue PI came to be.
The medical field has been near and dear to my heart for as long as I can remember. As a kid, I wanted to be a…Read More
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I think this is brilliant
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I love how you combined the two versions like we talked about in the club meeting, this is so much better and has much more emotion than the one I listened to Wednesday. I didn’t watch this video version, just read it, but I think it’s great!
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I love this!
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The story starts very compelling. I would add some stronger adjectives in the second part ( It was a phenomenal success). I also would simplify the CTA. Only give them one option. I love the emojis.