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Hello, hello!!
Posting my Myth vs Fact draft here. For whatever reason, I continue to attract high-achievers to my hypnotherapy practice, and they’re really incredibly cool to work with. This is a post targeted to that crowd… I welcome any and all feedback here, Dr. Judy and Joan are my micro-team for this. Thanks in advance!Are you a…Read More
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Ok, so taking action and would love feedback @nancychen1gmail-com, @brhwcoachinggmail-com, @amymshannonhernandez-com… Thanks
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I totally couldn’t keep up with the words. But, the messaging is very powerful.
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I slowed it down to .75 and it was really easy.
Also, the crash sound effect is too early. Hold it for when you put the 40% fact on the screen.
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Thanks! very helpful… adjustments will be made and posted today!!
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Thank you @aslcivicagmail-com, love the feedback!
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Malinda, this is really good. Possible small considerations for tweaking. I’m with Amy H on the timing of the Breaking Glass. Although I might go further, and right after you shatter the glass, I would consider changing the language to 40% of trafficking is Male. You’ve shattered the glass for the reveal, For me, the extra panel to get “Male” did…Read More
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Thanks, Joel, I have been on the search for a GIF that would work for that exact spot… no luck yet though =(. I may post without it and then on the next one add that!
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nothing on giphy. Too bad. If it’s important, I wonder what it would cost on Fivver or some other place to make. Good Luck!
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Nice multimedia piece, Malida! What if you start with”Myth: Sex trafficking is a girls……” then “Fact: it’s a boys ,…” because the word ‘Myth’ might keep me reading, whereas I may not otherwise ( I already know trafficking is a girl issue). Also the end, how about a quick phrase about what your #film is raising $$ for (a doc on ….. X% goes…Read More
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Thank you for the feedback… more videos to come!
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Great job, loved this and very emotive and powerful!
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Thanks, Nancy!!
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MythBuster v2 –“Strong Willpower Will Always Trump Emotions”
Fact 1 – Your unconscious is about 100X faster than your conscious mind. Whatever exercise of will you wanted to make is long gone, before willpower can stop it. Basically, your horse is off to the races, and crossing the finish line, before you can even grab the reins. And way too o…Read More
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Hi Joel, will you have a visual that goes with the text?
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Hi Malinda, I hadn’t originally considered a visual, I was going to test recording it. I do like your idea though. I could imagine perhaps a horse drawing or two to illustrate. Thanks for the suggestion.
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Hi Joel! Wonder if using simpler, conversational words would make your piece even more powerful? Win over vs trumps; power through, knee jerk reactions vs anticipatory. Simplify and tighten it up perhaps? Also, perhaps refining your viewpoint; often willpower can only get you so far; then what? Seriously, consider HYPNOSIS — and why? FACT:…Read More
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Hi Nancy, Thanks for the excellent feedback. I will be put it to good use.
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Myth: German is a Challenging Language to Learn
Fact 1:
Every letter and letter combination has a distinct sound. You usually pronounce German words the same way you spell them phonetically. Therefore, pronunciation is easy once you have mastered the alphabet.Fact 2:
Learning German is easy – especially for English speakers. Both…Read More5 Comments-
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Hi Kerstin, This is very simple and clear. I would consider opening w/ Fact 2, and moving Fact 1 down, German is easy. For Fact 3, you might consider taking out that grammar is the hard part and stay w/ logical. And I would switch the last sentence around to emphasis, you can start speaking w/ others, even w/o perfect grammar. I think it makes a…Read More
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Thank you, Joel. It is great to have another person look over your content and give feedback. I really appreciate it.
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You are welcome!
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Hi Kerstin, what if you try to shorten and simplify each Fact so that a 12-year old can understand it quickly — that’s the average reading comprehension of us here in the US anyway. Perhaps a version that is less academic/intellectual may be more powerful and to the point?
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Thank you NancyChen for your feedback. Definitely something to consider.
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I love it – quick, powerful and needed. I read and process VERY quickly so it was ok for me… but I can see how it might be “too fast” for others to keep up with.