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JessicaPetter
3 years, 2 months ago

Kerstin! I love what you do, and so well explained. I can relate: my husband is French, and his entire family is only French-speaking, so I was pretty motivated to learn the language!! I have done some of the apps and youtube channels and also some in-person courses. I can relate to the absolute frustration of trying to wrap my brain around…Read More
- KerstinPeters
  3 years, 2 months ago
  
  Thank you, JessicaPetter. It is so frustrating to see how many people try it alone and struggle until they abandon learning the language.
JoelElfman
3 years, 2 months ago

Kerstin this is great. Your paragraphs are really, clear, clean and compelling for each idea. I would consider sub-headers for some of the them. Intention; Commitment; Discipline; Communication. You might move your story up, and consider a client story. The only part that really threw me off is your title. The title felt entirely counter-intuitive…Read More
- KerstinPeters
  3 years, 2 months ago
  
  Joel, thank you for the feedback. I was not too excited about the title and will still work on a more compelling one. Thank you for your suggestions.
  - KerstinPeters
    3 years, 2 months ago
    
    I thought about several other Titles after Shannon’s title templates. How do you feel about the following?
    
    Why You Shouldn’t Rely on Apps and Online Programmes to Learn a New Language
    
    Why Learning a New Language with Apps and Online Programmes Will Leave You Frustrated
    
    Why Hiring an Instructor to Learn a New Language Will Save You Time and I…Read More
  - KerstinPeters
    3 years, 2 months ago
    
    Here is a slightly shorter version with bolded main points:
    
    These days, you can find many language apps, online programmes and YouTube channels that promise you free and easy to follow resources to learn a new language without an instructor. However, most people will experience frustration and waste a lot of time trying to teach themselves a…Read More
    - KerstinPeters
      3 years, 2 months ago
      
      Unfortunately, the formatting of the bold words is not showing.
      - KerstinPeters
        3 years, 2 months ago
        
        Here are the words I will emphasize: accountability, support your individual strengths and weaknesses, communicate, overcome the fear to talk, knowing a country’s traditions and culture
NancyChen
3 years, 2 months ago

Hi Jessica,
- NancyChen
  3 years, 2 months ago
  
  …love your passion, it comes through here! Might it have more impact if you present your core argument point up front, like ” learning a language through fun, live interaction is way/infinitely/10X more effective than an online app”. And here’s why. I’d like to hear more about YOUR process up front; a bolder title would also convey your passion!
  - KerstinPeters
    3 years, 2 months ago
    
    Thank you, NancyChen for the suggestions. I am still not happy with the title but will nevertheless use it for a FB live. Do you have any suggestion for the title?
    - KerstinPeters
      3 years, 2 months ago
      
      Here are some more title ideas: 1) Why Apps Don’t Teach You Communication 2) Why You Should Not Rely on Apps to Learn a Language 3) Why an App Cannot Teach You Conversations in a Foreign Language 4) Language App Versus Human Instructor – How to Learn a Language Successfully

NancyChen
3 years, 2 months ago

Hi Jessica, this is now reading more effectively for me as a reader and covering all the bases. Brava!
NancyChen
3 years, 2 months ago

And Jessica, would you also give me some feedback on my latest video blog? I posted the link here on our wall 2 days ago. Your thoughts are most appreciated! Thanks, Nancy
NancyChen
3 years, 2 months ago

Hi again Jessica, I believe you asked me for feedback on your title? I think the current title is very effective ; and I also think the first sentence that follows it makes your point even stronger, “Talk therapy SUCKS”. If you’re open to kicking the tone up, how about something like,” Why Therapy SUCKS and Hypnotherapy ROCKS at Solving Your…Read More

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