Charlotte Allen

JoelElfman
2 years, 7 months ago

Nancy,
I really like your PSA. lots of good content.
My question is how much do you want to turn up the heat?
I modified the opening title and the start of a couple of the passages. As I saiid the rest I felt was really good. You may or may not want to get as aggressive as I’ve written these.

“Who the Hell Says that Asian Women Leaders Have Not…Read More
- JoelElfman
  2 years, 7 months ago
  
  One more note, that caught me right at the end. Your website, is “POWER THE QUEEN”, which is absolutely brilliant. I am curious, when you are in one of those moments, when perhaps you fully step into & embrace being “YOUR MOST POWERFUL QUEEN”,, what changes, if any might she make in your PSA.
  - JoelElfman
    2 years, 7 months ago
    
    PS. There are lots of different versions & forms of POWER. Please forgive if I stepped too far in the aggressive, male version of it, with my suggestions.
- NancyChen
  2 years, 7 months ago
  
  Hi Joel, thanks for your specific feedback, very helpful; I feel encouraged to strengthen the tone up a notch. And I don’t mind your speaking your assertive mind at all. I do like, “Who Says Asian Women Leaders….?”. (Don’t want to scare off the mostly soft spoken introvert prospects — haha). Everybody seems to love my Power To The Queen name…Read More
  - JoelElfman
    2 years, 7 months ago
    
    Hi Nancy,
    I’m glad you liked my notes. And part of why I said to myself am I going too far, was in consideration of both you & for your audience. And again, there are lots of versions of being powerful. It might even bee something you talk about yin vs. yang, soft vs. hard. And within one there is the other.
    One other thing to consider, if…Read More
    - NancyChen
      2 years, 7 months ago
      
      Great future PSA Seed Idea, Joel!!
Nancy Jackson
2 years, 7 months ago

Great content Nancy! I echo Joel a bit in that I feel you could get this across even more with a bit more “queen fire” 🙂 I’m a little late to this so perhaps that’s something you’ve already changed up. And of course if you were going live or on video with this you’d be able to convey far more emotion and tone to it. Well written, but maybe a…Read More
- NancyChen
  2 years, 7 months ago
  
  Scorch marks, Nancy J, yeah! Here’s my PSA#1 Video. Can you take a look when you get a chance? (it seems I can’t post it directly). I can turn on the heat a lot more than this; you give me the idea of showing a “hotter” version to my clients for their response. Thanks! Thanks!https://youtu.be/Xk2ewiJ5kA4
Nancy Jackson
2 years, 7 months ago

I missed this Nancy C! It shows that the video is private so I’m unable to watch, but I look forward to seeing it when you go live!!

JessicaPetter
2 years, 7 months ago

Awesome job, Joel! I struggle to speak to the difference between hypnotherapy and stage hypnosis daily, and you’ve done such an articulate job with great engagement. This difference is what everyone wonders about, so I love that you tackled it!
- JoelElfman
  2 years, 7 months ago
  
  Thanks Jessica. I’m trying.
NancyChen
2 years, 7 months ago

Joel, I see a lot of good content here, and I invite your to make it clearer to an unfamiliar reader, like me.
NancyChen
2 years, 7 months ago

continued….pressed wrong key. Title: “My love/hate relationship,…?”. #1 Say what it is: If it’s not about control, and people do have a choice, what is it about? #2 Give context for understanding: “The truth is… ” move this up, dive deeper – help reader appreciate the distinction and point of view you are asserting. #3 Counter example:…Read More
- JoelElfman
  2 years, 7 months ago
  
  Thanks Nancy for all this awesome feedback. I will work on this.
Amy Flo-Yo
2 years, 7 months ago

OHHHH I love the idea of doing as a video
- JoelElfman
  2 years, 7 months ago
  
  Thanks Amy Flo-Yo

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