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Here’s email #1 from the BS debunking session. Would love feedback!
All of the coaches, courses, books, podcasts you’ve been investing your time and money on to shift your mindset aren’t helping you uplevel yourself or the impact you’re making on the world.
OOF. That stings, doesn’t it.
So, what does create that uplevel in your life an…Read More
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opening line needs to change from: All of the coaches, courses, books, podcasts you’ve been investing your time and money on to shift your mindset aren’t helping you uplevel yourself or the impact you’re making on the world.
to: All of the coaches, courses, books, podcasts you’ve been investing your time and money on to shift your mindset aren’t…Read More -
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rework: From my time on the front lines to working with hundreds of leaders, teams, and organizations over the past 7 years, I know without a doubt that mindset is a component of change.
TO: I know without a doubt that mindset is a component of change.
(you estabilsh your expertise in the 25 years line and paragraph above. Say what is.)-
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Gotcha. Thank you both. Here’s my reworked copy. Any additional thoughts?
All of the coaches, courses, books, podcasts you’ve been investing your time and money on to shift your mindset aren’t helping you uplevel yourself and the impact that you’re making on the world.
OOF. That stings, doesn’t it.
So, what does create that uplevel in your…Read More
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This looks great 🙂
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Here are my 4 Emails – would love feedback.
My ideal clients are overwhelmed, energetically depleted changemakers (think social change/social justice warriors) who want to feel grounded, validated, clarity of next steps, and peace of mind. I’m offering an Ease & Energy call as the entry point of conversation.(Problem 1) Subject: Are you…Read More
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can you make this line a little clearer? * You believe who you were is who you are, discounting your very real lived experiences.
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Not sure how I could say this any clearer. Do you have any suggestions?
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took me a few days. (I am not sure I can get this done to one line and I also feel like you might be able to use your clients words to say this better) You have discounted all your very real life experience and you are living in the past. You identify who you WERE and not who you have become because of your amazing life experiences
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Hey Amy… thanks for this. Okay… using their very real words, would something like this work?
You believe who you’ve been is who you will always be, discounting who you are becoming.
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There you go!
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Can you say this in a way your clients are saying it. I don’t know that they would say “I am using someone else framework and it isn’t working” * You’re outsourcing your wisdom to someone else’s framework.
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How about this: “You believe someone else knows what is best for you and your business.”
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yes!!!
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Kim Romain
Life & Business Alchemist
I am a Life & Business Alchemist for changemakers and paradigm shifters who are ready to revolutionize their self-mastery and unleash their social impact with ease. I help leaders and their teams be seen, heard, and understood beyond anything they have experienced before through my signature Strengthscape Method - a comprehensive personal development system designed specifically for agents of change, helping them understand and harness the wisdom of their inner world so they can continue changing the world with greater ease and joy.
Hi KIm- You might consider I believe in front of “As many coaches…” The 2 paragraphs on your qualifications as an expert are great. But then the email goes into all the details of the offer and the message gets lost as it makes it very long. Hope this helps 🙂