Hi Kathy! It’s great you went and asked your clients, because they are the ones you want to speak out to, so using their language is helpful. I feel the statement lacks a little bit of emotion, though I could see someone who could be your client (me!). Perhaps just a couple of change in words like embrace their inner beauty, their true essence and bring out their confidence. When we work together you walk away feeling great about yourself and loving your body no matter your size, age or comfort level.

Kathy – can you put a photo in your profile? It helps us remember who one another is from class. I agree- the more you practice it, the better the info will sound (in that natural way)