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Here’s the link to my coaching page: https://www.mylestogo.net/coaching
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As requested, the URL for my sales page is: http://www.sarafins.com/bookkeeping
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BodyHypnosis Signature Program
Are You Operating from Your Best Self?
Create Clarity, Connection & Transformation
– Reduce Stress, Anxiety
– Create More Happiness, Confidence & Ease
– Build New Habits, Beliefs & Ways of Thinking (i.e. Weight Loss, Stop Smoking, Imposter Syndrome and more)
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Hello Joel, I like that you described most of your benefits in a positive way, maybe you could also rewrite the first benefit: Establish More Balance and Calmness (or something similar)? I would move the words around in your CTA: Schedule a Clarity Call, and learn how the 12-week BodyHypnosis Program can improve your life.
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Thanks Kerstin, I’ve changed the CTA and looking at the other changes you suggested. Just sent it off to my web people. I’ll make more changes soon.
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Here’s my copy for the TinyBiz Blueprint pilot course:
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)Serious About Simplifying?
Architect Your 1 Page Blueprint for Your Simplest Possible Business
support your lifestyle while you do your good in the world[Count Me In] button jumps down to buy button
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I feel like this might be too long and could be more concise. I don’t think you need to use the word pilot because it makes it sound like you are creating a blueprint for a pilot program not necessarily a business.
I am not fond of the word architect. It’s not relatable and architecting something doesn’t sound simple or easy. I think design,…Read More
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I agree with Annette. I would replace the word architect with create or design because you want your plan to be flexible and unique and not strict and without any tolerances. I would use the word pilot in a subtitle.
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Great advice from Annette and Kerstin. You do not need to say it is pilot program. It is a four-week program.
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Nichole, this is really good. Most of the comments are about color or fonts.:
1- Gold on white is sometimes hard to read, especially w/ a cursive script. With this particular font, both the opening “N”, and later the opening “I” in a later testimonial almost blend a bit w/ the italics designating it as a testimonial.
2- “Until I discovere…Read More