Hi Jessica, this is now reading more effectively for me as a reader and covering all the bases. Brava!

And Jessica, would you also give me some feedback on my latest video blog? I posted the link here on our wall 2 days ago. Your thoughts are most appreciated! Thanks, Nancy

Hi again Jessica, I believe you asked me for feedback on your title? I think the current title is very effective ; and I also think the first sentence that follows it makes your point even stronger, “Talk therapy SUCKS”. If you’re open to kicking the tone up, how about something like,” Why Therapy SUCKS and Hypnotherapy ROCKS at Solving Your…Read More

Ally,
You’ve got a ton of quality elements in here. Some thoughts here are similar, so you might consider cutting it down, but I’m not sure it’s necessary. It’s pretty compelling content, I don’t think there would be any bad choices about what to cut or if you kept it all. You could experiment with giving yourself a word count or paragraph limit,…Read More

Coming back to the title. It didn’t capture my attention, the way your content does, and you’ve got some great lines in your content that I think you could adapt.

For example:
“The Amazon Bestsellers Award: It’s a stamp of approval from the algorithm Gods not a stamp of value.
“An Amazon Bestsellers Award is great, but is your book compellin…Read More

Hey @allytwprt-com – I love this piece! Like Joel said – I’d start with a title at the top that just packs a punch. well done!

Agree you can say the same thing in much fewer words 🙂 And maybe focus more on what the ABS stamp really is – maybe that is another post…. It is people giving their book away for 99cents (audio only) to get enough ‘purchases’ for the algorithm to bump it. For those of us what have been around the block a bit – know it truly has no meaning,…Read More

Hi Ally, I really appreciated your point of view in this piece; it gave me information I found useful to keep in mind, and I felt quite encouraged too, I was, however, not sure what your product/service offering is and how it will benefit me — may want to land these points more firmly. “I’m in the business of writing quality books and focusing o…Read More