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Still need to write subject lines but would love feedback on these 4 emails from today’s workshop:
Email 1:
If you’re a CEO struggling to see real results from your team’s marketing efforts…
It may be because you lack a cohesive, data-driven strategy that truly resonates with your target audience.
There are two reasons this continues to h…Read More1 Comment -
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Would love feedback on this email I wrote after our session today!
Subject: It’s not about the stuff
Preview: What I’ve learned as a self taught marketer (a series)Hey NAME,
Several years ago, as a new mom learning to juggle a new career and a 1 year old, I found out my job was being eliminated. One of the biggest stressors in lif…Read More
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I like this… but one tiny change. You need to talk emotion… not brain. Change this line: I landed a job in corporate retail for a running company, but immediately knew I didn’t fit in.
I landed a job in corporate retail for a running company, but immediately felt that I didn’t fit in.
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Nice one! Like Amy mentioned, more emotion would be great. Is there a part of the story where you made a sale to the mum who wants to run 5k? So as to share the story and then the point comes after in brief? Just a suggestion.
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These are great! Email 3, the first line to me doesn’t capture the want it’s more stating the problem. Seeing sales slow flatline is an issue, not what I want. Perhaps turning it around to “If you’re a CEO whose sales are not sky rocketing” so that you’re stating the want of sales being high.