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JulianneMiller, AFC®

• 2 years, 2 months ago

Is everyone getting notifications from this forum? I am not receiving notifications when someone posts something. I have checked the settings and they look ok.

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- JoelElfman
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  I don’t think we get notified about everything. You may have to be friends w/ the person or may have to have commented previously. I forget the exact parameters.
  - JulianneMiller, AFC®
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    ah, ok that makes sense. Thank you
JulianneMiller, AFC®

• 2 years, 2 months ago

Below is my visual content for my post. Left side represents the setbacks and right side represents the ah-ha moments.

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- JoelElfman
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  Pretty good, the negative money is:” is the only place I think that needs more attention. I would consider chunking down and getting specific here. Sorry some of these are long for space allotted.
  * Late payments
  * Borrowing to stay afloat
  * Scrambling to meet bills
  * Overwhelmed by details
  * Watching your dreams of house, car, wedding, drift…Read More
  - JulianneMiller, AFC®
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    ok so that’s some great feedback. I think I can get some of these in there with some detail. Thank you!
  - JulianneMiller, AFC®
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    Thanks Joel, great feedback!
- Annette Presley
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  I like Joel’s suggestions. Make it more specific so people can relate. I love from stressed and stuck to calm and collected. I’m not crazy about the blurb after that because it doesn’t roll off the tongue well and it’s more about you than the client. How about something like, “How small, daily improvements with money can empower you to make the…Read More
  - JulianneMiller, AFC®
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    Great, thank you Annette!
  - KerstinPeters
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    I agree with Annette and Joel. I would change it from “Money is” to “Money decisions are…”.
JoelElfman

• 2 years, 2 months ago

Trying to write this Turning Point/Journey piece been a tortuous piece for me. It’s still way too long, but at least it’s progress.
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Almost all of my life I’ve sat uneasily on an uneven 3 legged stool, wobbling back & forth between a wild imagination, physical activities and the expectations of others or society.

⁃ As a young boy, I…Read More

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- Amy Flo-Yo
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  OK – what is the call to action here?
- Amy Flo-Yo
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  I think it is brilliant, flows wonderfully. A few small take outs to tighten in up.. and off it goes:
  
  DANG IT – the friggin strike throughs won’t show up in here. SO here it is with stuff just deleted:
  
  Almost all of my life I’ve sat uneasily on an uneven 3 legged stool, wobbling back & forth between a wild imagination, physical activities a…Read More
  - JoelElfman
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    Thanks @Amy Flo-Yo for the comments & for the CTA reminder. I got so caught up in the writing, I forgot.
    
    CTA – If you are interested in connecting mind & body, being that better, more natural version of yourself, then reach out and schedule a discovery chat. If you can imagine a happier, more confident you, getting more done, easily &…Read More
    - Amy Flo-Yo
      2 years, 2 months ago
      
      LOL – still too many words 😉 As a past grant writer I know all about more words to fill word count and fluff…BUT this type of stuff needs to be “easy” to process. That first sentence is clunky. just use this: If you can imagine a happier, more confident you, getting more done, easily & effortlessly, and feeling better about life then we…Read More
      
      JoelElfman
      2 years, 2 months ago
      
      Thanks again, Amy, I knew it was clunky, thanks for your suggestions.
- Annette Presley
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  I tightened it a little, so here’s my version:
  
  For most of my life I’ve sat uneasily on a 3 legged stool, wobbling back & forth between a wild imagination, physical activities, and the expectations of others or society.
  
  ⁃ As a young boy, I did Modern Dance, until it didn’t seem like the thing a boy should be doing.
  
  ⁃ I was a voracious reader…Read More
  - JoelElfman
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    Thanks Annette, wonderful edit. You & Amy Flo-Yo are awesome.
    - JoelElfman
      2 years, 2 months ago
      
      Many thanks to @Amy Flo-Yo & @Annette Presley for their wonderful edits. I blended parts of both for the rewrite. I also added a new paragraph to start, because I thought it fit the theme really well. I also included an alternative flip at the bottom of the 1st paragraph, just in case folks thought that might be better.
      =================
      
      When…Read More
      
      Annette Presley
      2 years, 2 months ago
      
      I like the beginning. There is some duplication. I don’t think you need both of these paragraphs:
      
      Hypnosis has given me more confidence, made me feel more relaxed, and has allowed me to help an amazing array of people.
      
      ⁃ Hypnosis has been a beautiful gift to me, helping me become more confident and relaxed, and allowing me to help an amazing a…Read More
      
      JoelElfman
      2 years, 2 months ago
      
      @Annette Presely Thank you for catching the duplication & grammar. I will edit accordingly.
      
      Annette Presley
      2 years, 2 months ago
      
      I would use but in truth instead of and in truth with the second paragraph. And there is redundancy in these two paragraphs.
      
      The body is as much a part of our unconscious as our mind. The body always speaks the truth to us, and it gives us simple, natural, elegant tools to help us, even when we are inarticulate, caught up in overthinking, or…Read More
- JoelElfman
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  Posted on FB, LinkedIn, & is the new About page for my website
Shannon

• 2 years, 2 months ago

Happy Wednesday Club peeps! Want to get a little more support on your messaging –in a super fun conversational way?

This week we are highlighting Ep 2 of our Season 2 podcast: is out – and this week we invite you to take a deeper look with us at how to create an in-demand brand. This is all about your CP + the messaging ecosystem + your exp…Read More

S2E2: How to Become an In-Demand Brand [Grow Your Business for Good Podcast]

S2E2: How to Become an In-Demand Brand [Grow Your Business for Good Podcast]

https://mshannonhernandez.com/podcast-202/

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JulianneMiller, AFC®

• 2 years, 2 months ago

Question: How do you keep your program or method intact while still providing client-specific results?

I’m working on my ah-ha/setbacks and one of the setbacks is that advice from friends or books can often not work for clients because it’s not specific to them or their situation. Up to this point, I’ve been coaching from a place of “client…Read More

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- AmyHager
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  Are you coming to the Sig System Brainstorm on Aug 23rd? I think this might be a good workshop for you to join us in. https://joyfulbusinessrevolution.com/signaturemethodbrainstorm/
  - JulianneMiller, AFC®
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    Yes and that’s one of the reasons I started thinking about it. We’ll talk more soon also.
Stephanie Zoernack

• 2 years, 2 months ago

I’m trying to get better at coming to this community, I’ll work on it! I would love some feedback on my story, I’m not sure how the tension and relief flows, how compelling it is, or if the CTA is too complicated. This is my 2nd draft after Tanya helped me rework a few things. Thanks!

The year was 2013 and I was at my heaviest weight ever, and…Read More

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- KerstinPeters
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  The story starts very compelling. I would add some stronger adjectives in the second part ( It was a phenomenal success). I also would simplify the CTA. Only give them one option. I love the emojis.
- AmyHager
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  I feel like you are missing something…. are you your ideal weight now? did you find that something you were looking for in the last round of experimentation?
- JoelElfman
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  Stephanie,
  once again, nice job, I think you are pretty much on-target.I would open a little different, edit a few other places, and add a little more detail to give people a stronger feeling about what your struggles.
  
  My journey to learning how to lose weight joyfully began n 2013. I was at my heaviest weight ever, and officially obese.
  
  When I…Read More
- Annette Presley
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  Some different ideas for some of the sentences:
  
  It took me 6 whole years to lose just 40 lbs.
  I lost 40 lbs in only 4 months! I was so excited and on top of that I managed to keep the weight off for an entire year.
  
  But then I gained back 12 lbs. What I was doing to lose weight wasn’t helping me keep the weight off. I needed to try something…Read More
- JoelElfman
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  Love the version you published
TanyaEasterling

• 2 years, 2 months ago

Good Afternoon friends! I’ve posted my long form and a link to the video for how the Revenue PI came to be.

Hey Hey! My name is Tanya, and today I wanted to introduce myself and tell you the story of how The Revenue PI came to be.

The medical field has been near and dear to my heart for as long as I can remember. As a kid, I wanted to be a…Read More

How The Revenue PI Came to be

Video

https://1drv.ms/v/s!ApUUTjblSjqahsM_m8mMy_nN5_rjoQ

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3 Comments
- JoelElfman
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  I think this is brilliant
- Stephanie Zoernack
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  I love how you combined the two versions like we talked about in the club meeting, this is so much better and has much more emotion than the one I listened to Wednesday. I didn’t watch this video version, just read it, but I think it’s great!
- Annette Presley
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  I love this!
Shannon

• 2 years, 2 months ago

Hello lovely Club members! Want to get a little more support on your messaging –in a super fun conversational way? Season 2 of our podcast is out – and this week we invite you to take a deeper look with us at the conscious and subconscious impact your words are having on others. Tune it at the link to join me + Amy in a fun convo!

S2E1: The Psychology of Your Messaging [Grow Your Business for Good Podcast]

podcast

https://mshannonhernandez.com/podcast-201/

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KerstinPeters

• 2 years, 2 months ago

Here is step 2 of the message, the story outline:

Immigrating to Canada, I had the language skills after a two-year certification as a foreign language correspondent. While I could perform oral business translations, I did not dare to talk to people. During the full-time programme, the goal was perfection. However, we never practiced improvised…Read More

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- Shannon
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  Great draft – my recommendation would you warm this up with wayyy more emotion (I know this is hard for some cultures). Here’s a rewrite so you get the gist:
  
  I was so afraid of everyone thinking I was stupid, that I practiced my new language with our puppy–who I knew would not be judgemental and would be willing to listen! After immigrating to…Read More
  - KerstinPeters
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    Thanks, Shannon, I see what you mean. I will see what I can do.
  - JoelElfman
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    I’m wondering if you can also make a joke about the puppy’s conversation improving as well.
    - KerstinPeters
      2 years, 2 months ago
      
      @Joel, that is not a bad idea. I will see if I can add that.
  - KerstinPeters
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    Second draft:
    
    When I immigrated to Canada, I had the language skills to thrive in my new country after a two-year certification as a foreign language correspondent. While I could confidently perform oral business translations, I did not dare to talk to people. During the full-time programme, the goal was perfection. However, we never practiced…Read More
KerstinPeters

• 2 years, 2 months ago

Do you need a little extra support with your content creation? Come hang out with fellow Content Personality Club students to talk through anything that keeps you from putting your messages out. This session on the fourth Wednesday of the month is not hosted by Shannon or Amy.
Here is the link to my personal zoom sessions for you:

Topic: 4 Th…Read More

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- KerstinPeters
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  As some members mentioned the have a time conflict on the 4th Wednesday, is there another time that would suit you?
  - KerstinPeters
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    Does anyone plan to come tomorrow to the 4 Th Wednesday Community Cooperation?
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