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Karen Joy Fritz

• 2 years, 6 months ago

Hi, I’m Karen Joy

What I do: I am THE Purposetivity Mentor for creative entrepreneurs who want to get important shit done. Together we build systems as river banks that keep you in FLOW.

And more interesting for this group, HOW I do it: As a TinyBiz! TinyBiz is a movement for those of us in a stage of life where, beyond a certain income, we…Read More

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JessicaPetter

• 2 years, 7 months ago

Hello, hello!! I’m Jessica, and I’m a hypnotherapist in the Seattle area. I am relatively new to the field; I became certified one year ago, and went full-time 4 months ago. Every single client inspires me, most especially the moments they gain their success and all the confidence that comes with that. That said, starting this type of…Read More

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Nancy Jackson

• 2 years, 7 months ago

PSA:

There’s nothing wrong with you. Not your story to own.

Being idle, having an off day, not feeling it, uncertainty…doesn’t mean you have a problem or there’s something wrong with you.

Not obtaining something like money in a short period of time doesn’t mean you have a money issue.

A kink in the hose doesn’t mean the hose is b…Read More

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- JoelElfman
  2 years, 7 months ago
  
  Nancy, I really like this. I think it is very, very strong, overall.
  - JoelElfman
    2 years, 7 months ago
    
    A few thoughts. In the opening. I’m not sure about “Not your story to own”. It was a little confusing to me. Maybe this could be stated a different way. It felt may too condensed a statement or too much shorthand for this opening thought.
    - JoelElfman
      2 years, 7 months ago
      
      I would consider taking this paragraph, “The energy of your words and thoughts matter a lot. The story you’re telling yourself matters a lot. The story that people are feeding you by preying on your pain, matters a lot. Rather than finding fault with yourself, rather than having someone convince you that you have a productivity problem, see this a…Read More
      
      JoelElfman
      2 years, 7 months ago
      
      Last thought for the moment, I am wondering in the CTA, if “vision” is the right word. For me, it doesn’t quite feel like that what’s you’ve been evoking with the rest of the your language. It is a wonderful word, and I can easily see you using it. Yet, for this copy, I’m thinking there might be something that fits better.
      
      Nancy Jackson
      2 years, 6 months ago
      
      Absolutely, will definitely play around with it and make sure it has a better flow. Thank you 🙂
  - Nancy Jackson
    2 years, 6 months ago
    
    Thanks for all the wonderful feedback and points Joel!! Very much appreciated 🙂
- NancyChen
  2 years, 6 months ago
  
  Hi Nancy J, I loved “A Kink in the Hose Doesn’t Mean the Hose is Broken” so much, it could be the title! I sense that the bridge of your client’s transformation journey may be from Point A, where the client feels broken, to outcome Point B: “So if you’d like to gain clarity and direction to get out of your way, and back to your (true?) vision”. I…Read More
  - Nancy Jackson
    2 years, 6 months ago
    
    Great point Nancy!!! And yes, I think that’s a better way to start it out – sort of an attention grabber. Most appreciative of your feedback!!
- AmyHager
  2 years, 6 months ago
  
  Great feedback from @nancychen1gmail-com and @bodymindhypnoticgmail-com.
  - NancyChen
    2 years, 6 months ago
    
    Hey Amy, I think I broke my ability to post (tried to upload a video). Would you post this on our community wall for me? And can I get my posting power back? Thanks.
    - NancyChen
      2 years, 6 months ago
      
      Here’s my PSA#1 Video. Let’s see if it works. Thanks for feedback.
      “Who Says Asian Women Leaders Have Nothing to Complain About?” : https://youtu.be/Xk2ewiJ5kA4
- NancyChen
  2 years, 6 months ago
  
  Hi again, Nancy. here’s my PSA #2 Video. Would love your feedback when you get a chance; Thanks!!! https://www.linkedin.com/feed/update/urn:li:activity:6924058865529475072/
  - Nancy Jackson
    2 years, 6 months ago
    
    I loved this! Great job 🙂 It was a great blend of overall facts with current truth and beyond. Until there’s true awareness around what you share, there will continue to be what people believe based on very old information. I think it’s important to also convey in some message that there’s so much more to Asian women then just the being smart and…Read More
NancyChen

• 2 years, 7 months ago

Hey, thanks for feedback, all!

PSA SEED IDEA #1:
“Debunking the Myth that Asian Women Leaders Have Nothing to Complain About”

1. Considered a “model minority” with nothing to complain about, Asian women are often invisible, overlooked, and under-rewarded at work, despite being subject to widespread gender and ethnic bias.…Read More

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- JoelElfman
  2 years, 7 months ago
  
  Nancy,
  I really like your PSA. lots of good content.
  My question is how much do you want to turn up the heat?
  I modified the opening title and the start of a couple of the passages. As I saiid the rest I felt was really good. You may or may not want to get as aggressive as I’ve written these.
  
  “Who the Hell Says that Asian Women Leaders Have Not…Read More
  - JoelElfman
    2 years, 7 months ago
    
    One more note, that caught me right at the end. Your website, is “POWER THE QUEEN”, which is absolutely brilliant. I am curious, when you are in one of those moments, when perhaps you fully step into & embrace being “YOUR MOST POWERFUL QUEEN”,, what changes, if any might she make in your PSA.
    - JoelElfman
      2 years, 7 months ago
      
      PS. There are lots of different versions & forms of POWER. Please forgive if I stepped too far in the aggressive, male version of it, with my suggestions.
  - NancyChen
    2 years, 6 months ago
    
    Hi Joel, thanks for your specific feedback, very helpful; I feel encouraged to strengthen the tone up a notch. And I don’t mind your speaking your assertive mind at all. I do like, “Who Says Asian Women Leaders….?”. (Don’t want to scare off the mostly soft spoken introvert prospects — haha). Everybody seems to love my Power To The Queen name…Read More
    - JoelElfman
      2 years, 6 months ago
      
      Hi Nancy,
      I’m glad you liked my notes. And part of why I said to myself am I going too far, was in consideration of both you & for your audience. And again, there are lots of versions of being powerful. It might even bee something you talk about yin vs. yang, soft vs. hard. And within one there is the other.
      One other thing to consider, if…Read More
      
      NancyChen
      2 years, 6 months ago
      
      Great future PSA Seed Idea, Joel!!
- Nancy Jackson
  2 years, 6 months ago
  
  Great content Nancy! I echo Joel a bit in that I feel you could get this across even more with a bit more “queen fire” 🙂 I’m a little late to this so perhaps that’s something you’ve already changed up. And of course if you were going live or on video with this you’d be able to convey far more emotion and tone to it. Well written, but maybe a…Read More
  - NancyChen
    2 years, 6 months ago
    
    Scorch marks, Nancy J, yeah! Here’s my PSA#1 Video. Can you take a look when you get a chance? (it seems I can’t post it directly). I can turn on the heat a lot more than this; you give me the idea of showing a “hotter” version to my clients for their response. Thanks! Thanks!https://youtu.be/Xk2ewiJ5kA4
- Nancy Jackson
  2 years, 6 months ago
  
  I missed this Nancy C! It shows that the video is private so I’m unable to watch, but I look forward to seeing it when you go live!!
JoelElfman

• 2 years, 7 months ago

PSA – 1st draft. I will probably end up doing this as a video.

– PSA – I Have a Love/Hate Relationship w/ Stage Hypnosis
– On the one hand, I hate when a stage hypnotists uses the model and myth that they take control someone’s mind.
– The truth of how hypnosis works, who has control, and what it looks like in a 1-1 setting is very d…Read More

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- JessicaPetter
  2 years, 7 months ago
  
  Awesome job, Joel! I struggle to speak to the difference between hypnotherapy and stage hypnosis daily, and you’ve done such an articulate job with great engagement. This difference is what everyone wonders about, so I love that you tackled it!
  - JoelElfman
    2 years, 6 months ago
    
    Thanks Jessica. I’m trying.
- NancyChen
  2 years, 6 months ago
  
  Joel, I see a lot of good content here, and I invite your to make it clearer to an unfamiliar reader, like me.
- NancyChen
  2 years, 6 months ago
  
  continued….pressed wrong key. Title: “My love/hate relationship,…?”. #1 Say what it is: If it’s not about control, and people do have a choice, what is it about? #2 Give context for understanding: “The truth is… ” move this up, dive deeper – help reader appreciate the distinction and point of view you are asserting. #3 Counter example:…Read More
  - JoelElfman
    2 years, 6 months ago
    
    Thanks Nancy for all this awesome feedback. I will work on this.
- Amy Flo-Yo
  2 years, 6 months ago
  
  OHHHH I love the idea of doing as a video
  - JoelElfman
    2 years, 6 months ago
    
    Thanks Amy Flo-Yo
JoelElfman

• 2 years, 7 months ago

Hi, I’m Joel. I’m a hypnotist and coach. And I help people change bad habits, and limiting ways of thinking, so they are happier, more successful and enjoy life more fully.

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