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Possible hooks:
*3 reasons you’re losing out on dances at festivals
* why your embrace could be costing you dances
*why you feel uncomfortable in your embraces
*want to improve your social dance connection and get more dances?
*from chaos to clarity in your embrace
*from ho-hum to orgasmic in your social dancing
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got it – thank you
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This is my favorite: *want to improve your social dance connection and get more dances? You are focusing on those who already dance, right?
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great – thank you and yes
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Hi Daniela, I’m new so take my comments w/ a grain of salt. Personally, I don’t know what embrace means in that context. I definitely know what the last entry means…”Stop getting stepped on!” I don’t know what social dances mean? I’m guessing that your target audience knows exactly what that means? Does that mean going to dance clubs and getting…Read More
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thank you
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H! Here is my first stab at a value content email. I did not use the 3 related tips format. Not sure if that is a must, but I felt it flowed better this week. Feedback appreciated!
Email subject line: Why focusing on your revenue could actually be hurting your business
and what to do instead
Hi TEST,
When it comes to keeping track…Read More
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I like this Sara. (Being a person who feels like Charlie Brown in class with the blah blah teacher -the minute people talk money/revenue / profit… huh?) I feel that I might like it shortened – you say “focus on profitability” – and my mind wants to know right away what that is and then vs what revenue is…. and then a tie in and your CTA….…Read More
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Thank you for the input and your honesty!
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I love this! I had a question about the difference between revenue and profitability, and then you answered it. You asked questions and shared tips without making me feel like I was doing something wrong, and when I realized I don’t do this – you offered a solution and hope!
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Thank you so much, Blair! I’m glad it felt clear and helped you in some way.
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Hi Sara, I felt there was too much explanation. I think most people understand some of the things you were explaining. So I cropped considerably. If you want to keep more of the explanations, I would tighten it up.
Technically, most of what is written is about making money & profit which could apply to marketing, sales, or other arenas.
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Thanks for the thoughtful input, Joel!
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Ok – so i tried to upload my attempt at this month’s messaging here and that didn’t work so i just went for it… – not sure what my block to this task is but here’s my attempt…
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I LOVE knowing this about you – swimming and tango and the stamina that’s needed. Well done – gives me a DIFFERENT glimpse into your world. <3
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This was my attempt at bridging something I do often (cook) and my business. Great session this week, I look forward to seeing more of your content being shared, email, posted, published… whatever. Get it out there
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i see… seems too easy!!! 🙂
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@amymshannonhernandez-com I was SO impressed when I saw this post in my feed a couple days ago. You bridged it SO well.
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Hey everyone! I took a stab at writing an email with the behind the scenes content and I’d love some feedback. I am not sure exactly how to tie in the CTA. I feel like it kind of sneaks up on you and needs a better transition. The topic is Travel and the hook is a question. Thanks!
Here is the email:
Title: How can getting your finances…Read More
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Well done! Neither of your CTAs bothered me. I would have preferred the first one (Want to hear more about that?…) in parentheses, but it works as is. I bet others will have tips about how to smooth those transitions, but to me they worked well.
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Thanks for sharing your love of travel, Sara. I love to travel too! May I make two suggestions?
Get specific and sensory. It’s the little details that spark engagement and presence you. Today I’m thinking back to a trip to Venice we made on our honeymoon. I remember the heat and the orange glow of the molten glass in the glass-blowing workshop on…Read More -
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I see how you feel you have dumped all the engagement at the end. What if you sprinkle it throughout and bold it so people see it.
Title: How can getting your finances organized free you from FOMO?I’m not sure if you know this about me, but I love to travel. I do it any chance that I get. From a weekend spa getaway to a trip to a new city – I’m…Read More
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I like all of these, I would change “want to improve…” to “how to improve…”