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Claire Peltier

• 10 months, 4 weeks ago

Hi All,

In February I want to focus on my new 1:1 program – it is built on various modalities I use and I feel will be more robust than what people buy most of the time : a Pack of 3 sessions.
Could you have a look at the landing page (I went back to the content lesson on Landing pages) and tell me :
Is it small enough when I talk about…Read More

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- TracyDowning
  10 months, 3 weeks ago
  
  Claire- is it possible to break this down into 3 sections? I got lost in all the info and what I was joining.
  - Claire Peltier
    10 months, 3 weeks ago
    
    Hi Tracy – I know… and that’s a landing page so it is longer…
    I have managed to put it on my website so it should be easier to read with the design – here is the link to the page
    https://en.anahatalight.com/alchimie-de-lame
Dan Lewis

• 11 months ago

#2 in a value messaging sequence I’m posting on Linked In. What I’m really trying to get across is the difference between a photo that evokes a sense of emotional connection and one that doesn’t. I want readers to feel, yeah, I want emotional connection in my photos!

Seven jobs your personal brand images should be doing for you –

#2 -…Read More

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- Claire Peltier
  11 months ago
  
  Hi Dan, I really like it. it is a very catchy post and made me think of my own headshots. Wow – got it, you ve nailed it ! Pitty I am so far away 😉
  
  A couple of things that came to my mind reading the post,
  I think the end is not as strong as the rest of the post and there are a bit too many things
  
  – I would sugget rewording that sentence :…Read More
  - Dan Lewis
    11 months ago
    
    Thanks, Claire! That is really helpful to end strong!
    - AmyHager
      11 months ago
      
      Claire is spot on!
- TracyDowning
  10 months, 3 weeks ago
  
  This connects Dan.
Dan Lewis

• 11 months, 1 week ago

Okay, I’ve created a proof of concept for my monthly “newsletter”. I’m open to any and all feedback – particularly on how I’m framing the intent in the introductory section. This issue is a little fat, to give a sense of the kind of articles I’m imagining. Let me know what you think! Any kinds of content you’d like to…Read More

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- Ann Becks
  11 months ago
  
  @danlewis, Wow!! I love this!! I love how you share with the reader glimpses into your expertise- contrast, choosing stone to reflect being solid and grounded; the softening of the tangled vines. Love the topics too.
  - Dan Lewis
    11 months ago
    
    Thanks, Ann!
- AmyHager
  11 months ago
  
  This is really good. Next level feed back here-
  Client Story:
  Executive Coach Roxanne Hori
  
  NO ONE CARES about a Client Story. You have to give me an attactive headline to get people to read your client stories. What woud you stay to stop my scroll?
  - AmyHager
    11 months ago
    
    People skim. Use bold and different size text so I see what you NEED me to see.
    - AmyHager
      11 months ago
      
      There are no clicks. You are going to have no list to follow up with. Tease your articles and have them click to read more.
      
      Dan Lewis
      11 months ago
      
      Thanks for the feedback, Amy! I’m unclear on the last point. You’re saying the email should just have teaser copy with a link to read the full article on my website?
      
      AmyHager
      11 months ago
      
      correct
Claire Peltier

• 11 months, 2 weeks ago

January content : Direct offer with client testimonial

10 spots for a Shamanic Circle to regain your Feminine Power – is it for you ?
A 3 hrs Live workshop

Women often think finding their feminine power is hard, or on the contrary, assume it is inherent to their being, but often have misconception on what it is really.

And I get it,…Read More

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- Shannon
  11 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Claire – like this a lot! I think to really make this pop you can talk a little bit about what the inner compass is and what the wound healing is. I think this will strengthen the piece and pull people in more.
  - SaraFins
    11 months, 2 weeks ago
    
    I agree. As a potential participant, I would want to know more of what that entails or means.
- Dan Lewis
  11 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Liked this, Claire. I second Shannon’s comment. I also get the problem state of confusion and mixed messages around women’s power. Bravo!
- TracyDowning
  11 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  What about identifying more of what feminine energy id rather than focusing on masculine energy or what healing looks/feels like?
  - Claire Peltier
    11 months, 2 weeks ago
    
    Thanks Tracy, you are right and I added that yesterday in the breakout room !
- SaraFins
  11 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Instead of: Here is what a client went through – could you say something like “here is what a recent client experienced during our work together” – to tie it more to her work with you?
  - Claire Peltier
    11 months, 2 weeks ago
    
    Thanks Sarah, yes sounds much nicer !
Dan Lewis

• 11 months, 3 weeks ago

A client story post – where the client is me! A post for Linked In and Facebook.

The photographer steps in front of the camera
I don’t know about you, but I’m constantly evolving – usually on several fronts at once! So I work to update my brand images once a year to keep up with the most current me. Matt, a recent client who’s a talented…Read More

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- Claire Peltier
  11 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Hi Dan, I love your story. I was wondering at the beginning how you d use the stepping in front of the camera, and I love, and resonate with what you describe, bringing in your essence, your unique style, your ever evolving, and taking us through your experience 🙂 pitty I am so far away !
  - Dan Lewis
    11 months, 2 weeks ago
    
    Thanks, Claire! I do think my lead in can be better focused.
- Shannon
  11 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Dan – great start. I think I would love to see a more personalized CTA here that positions your unique approach. Something maybe like this: Are you a coach, consultant or transformational leader committed to being boldly visible in service of sharing your gifts with your right-fit clients? Would you like to share the full essence of who you are in…Read More
  - Dan Lewis
    11 months, 2 weeks ago
    
    Oooh, yeah, I like that, Shannon. This piece can be honed. Thanks!
- TracyDowning
  11 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Very engaging and then your invitation to action dropped off. As usual Shannons is on point to complete your captivating beginning.
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