It will never be perfect ;0 ) I am gad you didn’t let the phone stop you.

You’ve come so far since we chatted in the breakout room! It sounds great to me, how’s it feel to you?

Hi Joel, will you have a visual that goes with the text?

Hi Joel! Wonder if using simpler, conversational words would make your piece even more powerful? Win over vs trumps; power through, knee jerk reactions vs anticipatory. Simplify and tighten it up perhaps? Also, perhaps refining your viewpoint; often willpower can only get you so far; then what? Seriously, consider HYPNOSIS — and why? FACT:…Read More

Hi Kerstin, This is very simple and clear. I would consider opening w/ Fact 2, and moving Fact 1 down, German is easy. For Fact 3, you might consider taking out that grammar is the hard part and stay w/ logical. And I would switch the last sentence around to emphasis, you can start speaking w/ others, even w/o perfect grammar. I think it makes a…Read More

Hi Kerstin, what if you try to shorten and simplify each Fact so that a 12-year old can understand it quickly — that’s the average reading comprehension of us here in the US anyway. Perhaps a version that is less academic/intellectual may be more powerful and to the point?

Joel – who are your Zoom Mates this month in your pod? You’ll want to tag them so they can review this and give feedback!

Hello Joel, I am one of your Zoom Mates. For the title, I would prefer Is Willpower the Best Motivator/Motivation for Change? I can relate to the fact that you present and find them compelling to try hypnosis. Fact 1: I would use nouns for all reasons. Fact 2, I would add the horse as an example to visualize what you mean. Let’s imagine a horse…Read More

Maybe make the Myth an erroneous statement to make it more catchy. Like “You have to go through the misery of white-knuckling-it to change your life.”