BethShenton

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I’m doing an upcoming workshop w/ a friend. It is a guided meditation & energetic healing. So I thought I would experiment w/ using the Nov format to promote. Energy is sometimes, a hard concept to easily quantify or make understandable for the masses, but I thought I would take a shot at it. I did my best. I encourage…Read More

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Brenda Uekert
2 years, 1 month ago

I got bogged down in the intro. Read it 3 times and I’m still not sure what it says. Do you need the energetically in the second sentence – You are unconsciously blocked by past trauma and events.

You are missing “years” from the next sentence, “For over 5,000 [years]. . . And I’m a cynic. When you say that Western science has caught up, it feels…Read More
- JoelElfman
  2 years ago
  
  Hi Brenda,
  Thank you very much for your comments. Since it is an event combining guided meditation & energetic healing, I feel like the energetically is needed but I will consider it further.
  I was thinking that “Western science has caught up…” the other way, that Eastern philosophy was way ahead and we are only beginning to catch up. I guess…Read More
  - Brenda Uekert
    2 years ago
    
    Hey Joel – your audience may very well be in tune with the concepts. I’m reading this as an “outsider,” so you might want to try it out on a few fans who are better informed of your offerings.
    - JoelElfman
      2 years ago
      
      Hi Brenda, thanks again for your suggestions. I was trying to expand the audience, but it might be more challenging than I thought.
BethShenton
2 years ago

I really love the work you are doing, Joel. All the up front descriptions feel heavy, though I get why you want to share the detail there. Interested to see any edits you made, if you want to share them!
- JoelElfman
  2 years ago
  
  Hi Beth, thanks for your encouraging note. I was trying to widen the audience but I don’t have quite right yet. This one may have to stick w/ folks more familiar w/ energy work. I will either share something tomorrow or just get it out the door.

AmyHager
1 year, 9 months ago

love the title – very hooking 😉
- JoelElfman
  1 year, 9 months ago
  
  Thanks! It was a fun one to come up with!
- SafriannaLughna
  1 year, 9 months ago
  
  Agree! Very “eye catch” title (I couldn’t help myself).
Susanlazar hart
1 year, 9 months ago

very engaging

AmyHager
2 years, 1 month ago

This is one of your strongest pieces yet!
- Brenda Uekert
  2 years, 1 month ago
  
  Thank you!
JoelElfman
2 years ago

Great piece!
- Brenda Uekert
  2 years ago
  
  Thanks, Joel!
BethShenton
2 years ago

This is a great piece – readable and motivating!

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