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This is my ‘I believe’ post, introducing my new hair service called the OH MY GODDESS.
Feedback for spelling, grammar and if this is clear or confusing please. Thank you.!NEW SERVICE ALERT!
I believe that we all could use more time to connect with ourselves. To be able to slow down, disconnect from the world, and tap in to our truest…Read More
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I’ll try!
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Hi Aimee, this is an attempted reconstruction of a previous post. If you already read that one see which of them you like more. The first paragraph is FIRE! The second one starts slow. Instead, how about: “The OH MY GODDESS experience is energy work fused with hair and scalp treatment services. Energy modalities such as Reiki, breathwork, and…Read More
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crap my comments just disappeared !!!
I love this! and would love to experience the service!!!I have a similar suggestion to RuthRoland. Here is my suggestion:
The second sentence.
Infusing (my gifts of) energy work with my hair and scalp treatment services it’s called the OH MY GODDESS Experience.(like leading into excitement!)
And in the…Read More
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My thought leader content…
Does this make you feel like buying?Here is the key reason why your hair is dull and lifeless even though you take care of your hair with quality hair products.
It’s because you have metal and mineral build-up and your hair could use a detox!
It’s frustrating to spend lots of money on quality, pro…Read More
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Aimee, Not sure I’d go into the specific elements. And I’m not sure how your product can counteract the water issue. I really have no idea what goes into a hair detoxing session, but maybe your audience does?
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Thank you so much Brenda! I appreciate your feedback. I plan to use an image with the minerals and metals that are most harmful to the hair with a small explanation of the damage they cause to the hair. As well as a before and after photo of a client’s detox session. I would love to hear your thoughts on those visuals.
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I agree with Brenda about not using the specific elements. Do you have a story about someone who did the detox and how fabulous their hair was?
For the first sentence I’d say, “Here is the key reason your hair is dull and lifeless even though you use high quality hair products.”
“You have heavy metal and mineral build-up.”
What do I mean by…Read More
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This is soooooo helpful, thank you so much Annette. I prefer short and swet, but I’m learning that it doesn’t need to be like that all the time.
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You’re welcome!
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This is my direct offer. I’ll be posting on IG and FB. Also, any suggestions for a photo to go with this.
How you can have clean, healthy hair and scalp almost instantly!!
Are you a woman who has been blessed with fine, flat hair? Is greasy, gross feeling hair a constant battle? Is your hair lacking shine and just feels overall lifeless…Read More
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I am excited to see it with an image
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Hi Aimee, this is very good. 1-2 minor spelling errors (results & assessment). From what I understand Google can punish rankings of claims like “the most amazing”, the best, you can get around it by making it subjective. “I believe this is the most amazing..” Also, if you some authority, I would consider adding it here. “Being a stylist for 10…Read More
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Fuck. I accidently delete @ruthviolincox-net comment – when I was trying to say BRAVO on that feedback. DAMN. Ruth, sorry, do you remember what you wrote? It was spot on!