Love this! So glad you dove into this since this was the feedback you had been given about “doing yoga already.” Also – I would like you to use the word teach instead of present. Do you know why?

Hook suggestion: TO PARENTS WHO WANT TO BRIDGE THE GAP BETWEEN SCHOOL LESSONS AND REAL-WORLD SKILLS BUT BUT DON’T KNOW WHERE TO START.

This is SO FUCKING CLEAR!!! I also like Dan’s suggestion. Get this posted out into the World.

This is really clear, and really good but this is a lot to read, and to absorb. I would suggest at a minimum bullet points. I would consider if you need all of these at once. Can some be separated (use sub-headers) or just combine some of these?

I think this is great, Can you write it how you would post it? I feel like you are still sharing a draft/notes here.

This can flow better:
The steps and patterns fail you because you’re neglecting to consider your partnered communication and connection.

This is keeping you stuck and from progressing to dancing with better dancers.

Steps and patterns are failing preventing you from dancing with better dancers because you’re neglecting to consider your p…Read More

Very nice! I like that you will be addressing each of these separately – builds curiosity and the need to keep coming back for more solutions.

I would say what is. “It’s not easy to keep up your chops when on break.” = “It is usually hard for students to keep up with practice during break because their routine is disrupted”

Great post!

i love this- the idea of holiday stacking!!! so awesome!!! Katy Bowman would call it “movement snacking”!!! 🙂

Another great post – this made me laugh!

Like this hook. “Keep up your chops” is specific and evocative. Focuses on the competence you’ve gained, rather than feelings of guilt and shame for not practicing.

I love this. Yes, it flows wonderfully. Well done!

For me, a hook would be : “A “show up and shoot” approach to brand photography is inadequate to produce photos that connect with clients.” Having had at least 3 brand photoshoots already, this sentence would stop me in my tracks and I would like to keep reading.

Possible hook: Coaches, is your brand photo shoot a crap shoot?

I love what you are offering.
I keep having problems w/ the opening line. I feel I can have confidence about showing up on social media, networking or on stage, and GET the contracts they dream about, and still have a lousy website.
Maybe something like “For female consultants who are showing up on social media, networking or on stage, and w…Read More

Is your website sabotaging your business confidence?

Can’t wait to see the next version. Great feedback @danbadassity-com, @bodymindhypnoticgmail-com and @socialdanielaborgialli-com

I think I would be more direct in the hook. How about using the one that is on the handout (I think this was you?) “To People That Want to Feel Fulfilled But Don’t Know How to Get Started “

I apologize, I don’t understand the example, “I feel I must be in the gift of myself”. This sentence doesn’t make sense to me personally. Is there supposed to be a comma or some other grammatical marker in this sentence. In the alternative is there another example of a limiting belief you can use from a client or somewhere else.

I’ve been trying to translate “I feel I must be in the gift of myself” to french! IS this an expression? or are we talking about deservedness? worthiness?