Oh wow! I just landed on calm and confident for a three-week short program! Maybe we talked about it and it stayed with me?! I’m still tossing it around. But I don’t usually work with couples so different target lol

Hey Emily! So this is a really good start. And a landing page is much different than a sales page for a program – so I’d say you have about 2/3 of the stuff here needed. Do you have a transformation statement for this offer? We’d want to center the entire program around it! Also, I know you are thinking about the VIP Vacation – I think it would…Read More

Hi Emily, This is really good. 2 quick notes. How long is a session? I don’t think it said, but I could have missed it. The other thing was “-Confidently manage your money together so you can enjoy spending now, save more than ever before, fix your cash flow and feel financial peace of mind.” I don’t think the top item if I’m struggling would be…Read More

Nichole, this is really good. Most of the comments are about color or fonts.:
1- Gold on white is sometimes hard to read, especially w/ a cursive script. With this particular font, both the opening “N”, and later the opening “I” in a later testimonial almost blend a bit w/ the italics designating it as a testimonial.

2- “Until I discovere…Read More

whooo hoo!!

Hello Joel, I like that you described most of your benefits in a positive way, maybe you could also rewrite the first benefit: Establish More Balance and Calmness (or something similar)? I would move the words around in your CTA: Schedule a Clarity Call, and learn how the 12-week BodyHypnosis Program can improve your life.

I like this overall Kerstin, short and to the point. I wonder if you could include something that confirms I do not need to be an “artist” to enjoy this course, and also something to encourage me if I know absolutely “no German” now. Just to clarify who this program is for in a bit more detail.

I like this a lot. It does feel a little cut & dry. May get a little granular. How does the class have fun. Is there a particular fun exercise that you do, would it be okay to mention something about it. I’m wondering if any of your students have some funny stories about a situation where their conversational skill came in handy. Getting…Read More

I feel like this might be too long and could be more concise. I don’t think you need to use the word pilot because it makes it sound like you are creating a blueprint for a pilot program not necessarily a business.

I am not fond of the word architect. It’s not relatable and architecting something doesn’t sound simple or easy. I think design,…Read More

I agree with Annette. I would replace the word architect with create or design because you want your plan to be flexible and unique and not strict and without any tolerances. I would use the word pilot in a subtitle.
Design Your Custom TinyBiz Blueprint – a four-week pilot program to downshift your business to have more time, attention, and…Read More

Great advice from Annette and Kerstin. You do not need to say it is pilot program. It is a four-week program.