I like it Carrie. The only thing I would add is… “I hope to speak with you soon!” doesn’t sound like an invitation. (in sales we have to ASK for the order). What’s the next step or action you want them to take after this?

Hey Carrie, I feel like the connection between your values and the purpose of the resource could be stronger. It took me a few reads to get what you were going for, and I still feel like I’m reading between the lines.

Specifically, I wouldn’t repeat the title in the first sentence. I would use the brass tacks description you have at the end but bulleted so it is easy to skim, so it starts like this (brackets are my additions and edits):

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Hello there! I’m so happy you found From Tangled Tech to Smooth Systems.

This resource will help you clarify:
– [the purpose of all the] different software programs and workflows you are using;
– whether [or not] they are aligned with your goals;
– if [these programs can] position you for growth without burnout; and,
– [what to do if they can’t].

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I am potentially editing the intent of your resource with my changes, however, as a systems person myself I suspect these additions of my are already things you cover but may not be highlighting.

Then I would do an intro of yourself along with the value piece.

I believe that would help it flow better and give them what they want/need to keep reading right up front.

Please feel free to ignore my advice if it doesn’t resonate!