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DanielaBorgialli

• 2 years ago

Again was hoping to have Outcome / Results messaging for my women’s group BUT I decided to practice with Tango and wrote this. Any feedback ? and not sure where I will use it yet…(and is it “bad” etiquette to “accuse” other teachers?? is there a more polite way to say what i’m saying? )

Here is the key reason you’re still not getting the dances…Read More

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- AmyHager
  2 years ago
  
  You are not saying ANY about those other dance instructors. You kept it focused on the emotion and how the client was feeling
- JoelElfman
  2 years ago
  
  You may be talking to a specific audience so these questions might not be relevant.
  What does social dance-ability/navigating a social dance floor mean?
  What would be an example of a bad habit? I’m just asking for clarity.
  By dance reputation do you mean social dance reputation?
  - DanielaBorgialli
    2 years ago
    
    thanks @joel for your questions.
    so many teachers teach ‘tango’ as choreographed patterns and steps which is not useful for the social dance floor – so they /students don’t actually learn to dance – to lead or to follow.
    a bad habit in tango? there are so many – there are bad lead habits bad follow habits and then bad social dance floor etiquette…Read More
    - JoelElfman
      2 years ago
      
      Thanks @Daniela. Great answers, they make things a lot clearer for me. Here is another version based on your responses. I hope this helps.:
      
      Here is the key reason you’re still not getting the dances you want at social events – it’s not your focus, and it’s not your inability to learn something new…. it’s because your attention has been on mak…Read More
      
      DanielaBorgialli
      2 years ago
      
      Thanks @Joel for this super word sleuthing/word smithing – rewrite… I will massage it some more and then decide where to use it!!! 🙂
      
      JoelElfman
      2 years ago
      
      You are welcome. Your explanations were super helpful. I look forward to seeing the next iteration.
Brenda Uekert

• 2 years ago

Feedback welcome. This one is for my Gutsy Women Finances community.

Here’s a major reason why you continue to struggle with money, even though you have a decent income.

You weren’t taught a thing about how to manage your money growing up. Now you don’t know where to start and you haven’t found anyone you can really trust to guide you o…Read More

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- Annette Presley
  2 years ago
  
  I like it. But, there is a disconnect for me between the quiz and the community. You say this is for your Gutsy community but then you start the story with the quiz and the CTA is about taking the quiz, not joining a community. There isn’t any context for the community when you talk about it in the story. I would say this piece is about getting…Read More
  - Brenda Uekert
    2 years ago
    
    Thanks Annette. Perhaps the key is to work on two separate pieces – quiz and community. I’ll see what I can work up.
- Shannon
  2 years ago
  
  Brenda – great job diving in and taking action. Woohoo!
- JoelElfman
  2 years ago
  
  Hi Brenda,
  I love the opening.
  And I think you have a wonderful story about Madison & the club.
  Did Madison take the quiz before or after she joined Gutsy Women Club? Your mention of some of the things you did w/ her made me curious. Are the exercises and your instructions part of the Club something different? What do I get from the club if I…Read More
  - Brenda Uekert
    2 years ago
    
    Thanks, Joel. I’m going to separate the quiz from the GWF community. That should make things a whole lot clearer.
Annette Presley

• 2 years ago

would love some feedback. Is it compelling?

Here is a key reason your hormones are behaving badly, even though you are eating a healthy diet and taking DIM.

Your minerals are out of whack. You have too much iron and not enough copper.
What do I mean by that?

None of us wants to bust our butt at the gym, eat kale, and take a boatload of…Read More

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- Brenda Uekert
  2 years ago
  
  taking DIM? It’s a powerful story. Not sure you need this at the end – (which are BIG issues costing you time, money, joy, and your sanity). You’ve unearthed those pieces in your story.
  - Annette Presley
    2 years ago
    
    Thanks! I’ll take that out. DIM is a common supplement, but I might need to think of something else to put there.
- JoelElfman
  2 years ago
  
  instead of taking DIM, you can just mention supplements in general. Plus, DIM & DM are somewhat similar, someone skimming might not pay enough attention.
DanielaBorgialli

• 2 years, 1 month ago

decided to create a “9 word email” as a social media post – let’s see if i get some love!!!!

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- Shannon
  2 years ago
  
  What was the result Daniela?
  - DanielaBorgialli
    2 years ago
    
    a lot cheering and agreeing with me but no new leads or people actually biting for some lessons – but learned a lot!!! 🙂
Brenda Uekert is with AmyHager

• 2 years, 1 month ago

Sharing Assignment #2 for me – identifying my target audience for my main offering – the Gutsy Women Finances community. Thoughts? Suggestions?

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- AmyHager
  2 years, 1 month ago
  
  These are very clear.
- JoelElfman
  2 years, 1 month ago
  
  nicely done. very clear
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