AmyHager

DanielaBorgialli

• 2 years, 2 months ago

hello Everyone! (ok here it goes – Landing Page copy draft 1)
1. Beginner Argentine Tango course 1: eight week course for those with little or no experience dancing.
2. Tired of the day to day grind?
Beginner Argentine Tango course 1: begin your journey to relieve your stress and improve your overall health
Benefits:
* improve your overall…Read More

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- JulianneMiller, AFC®
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  I feel like your Number 3 point should actually be your title! There is more excitement in that. My recommendation is to move this “Do you need social interactions? are you bored? do you have zoom fatigue? Then this is the beginning –” to the title
  and leave this “Join this Entry level course to Argentine Tango your first step to fun!” as the l…Read More
  - DanielaBorgialli
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    Julianne – this is so juicy – and very helpful. I’m going to play some more with it but I really love it! Thank you for that!
    - AmyHager
      2 years, 2 months ago
      
      Can’t wait to see the second draft on Wed
  - Annette Presley
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    Another tweak. Instead of “Then this is just the beginning!” how about something like Then you need to dance!
    
    Instead of renew your social interactions how about make new friends, laugh, and feel like a human again.
- Karen Joy Fritz
  2 years, 2 months ago
  
  Zoom zone got you feeling bland? Tango your way to feeling grand!
  
  Enter the zesty world of beginning Argentine Tango and dance your way to balance, flexibility, strength, and endurance in a safe environment to laugh with new people. Argentine Tango – your first step to make exercise FUN!
  - DanielaBorgialli
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    This so fun to read!!! lol!!! Thanks for bringing some joy to my tunnel vision!
  - KerstinPeters
    2 years, 2 months ago
    
    Danielle, you have got some great suggestions here. I love how with every comment the piece gets better and better.
TanyaEasterling

• 2 years, 3 months ago

Good Afternoon friends! I’ve posted my long form and a link to the video for how the Revenue PI came to be.

Hey Hey! My name is Tanya, and today I wanted to introduce myself and tell you the story of how The Revenue PI came to be.

The medical field has been near and dear to my heart for as long as I can remember. As a kid, I wanted to be a…Read More

How The Revenue PI Came to be

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https://1drv.ms/v/s!ApUUTjblSjqahsM_m8mMy_nN5_rjoQ

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3 Comments
- JoelElfman
  2 years, 3 months ago
  
  I think this is brilliant
- Stephanie Zoernack
  2 years, 3 months ago
  
  I love how you combined the two versions like we talked about in the club meeting, this is so much better and has much more emotion than the one I listened to Wednesday. I didn’t watch this video version, just read it, but I think it’s great!
- Annette Presley
  2 years, 3 months ago
  
  I love this!
AimeeRussell

• 2 years, 4 months ago

This is my direct offer. I’ll be posting on IG and FB. Also, any suggestions for a photo to go with this.

How you can have clean, healthy hair and scalp almost instantly!!

Are you a woman who has been blessed with fine, flat hair? Is greasy, gross feeling hair a constant battle? Is your hair lacking shine and just feels overall lifeless…Read More

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- AmyHager
  2 years, 3 months ago
  
  I am excited to see it with an image
- JoelElfman
  2 years, 3 months ago
  
  Hi Aimee, this is very good. 1-2 minor spelling errors (results & assessment). From what I understand Google can punish rankings of claims like “the most amazing”, the best, you can get around it by making it subjective. “I believe this is the most amazing..” Also, if you some authority, I would consider adding it here. “Being a stylist for 10…Read More
KerstinPeters

• 2 years, 4 months ago

Direct Offer Email:

Guten Tag, NAME,

Do you want to become an engaged participant in German conversations?

I know how intimidating it is to learn and speak a new language from my own experiences. I did not dare to talk to people when I immigrated to Canada. I was so afraid everyone would think I was stupid because I could not express…Read More

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- AmyHager
  2 years, 3 months ago
  
  How did this go? I know you had it scheduled for after class. Do you have a link so we can see how it was laid out?
  - KerstinPeters
    2 years, 3 months ago
    
    Hi Amy, Here is the link to my newsletter: https://mailchi.mp/973bea04b7a5/german-news-5238392. I also posted it on my Facebook wall and shared it to my page and group. I had one comment and a couple of likes to the post. No response from the email.
    - KerstinPeters
      2 years, 3 months ago
      
      I will use the same template to promote my upcoming Facebook challenge this week. I will add FB lives to the mix to promote the event.
DonnaDube

• 2 years, 4 months ago

Would love any and all feedback on my direct offer post that would go into an email:

Hi ***,

Did you know that data driven businesses are 23 times more likely to acquire new customers and 19 times more likely to be profitable? Those are some staggering statistics folks, whether you love numbers or hate them. The evidence is clear that looking at…Read More

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- Annette Presley
  2 years, 4 months ago
  
  I think it sounds great!
  - DonnaDube
    2 years, 4 months ago
    
    Thanks Annette! I appreciate you taking the time to read it through.
- SusanMaldonado
  2 years, 4 months ago
  
  Yes this is so good!!
  - DonnaDube
    2 years, 4 months ago
    
    Thanks Sue! Appreciate it.
- NancyChen
  2 years, 4 months ago
  
  Hi Donna, this is reading tight and strong; good work, Any ideas for a grabby TITLE?
  - DonnaDube
    2 years, 4 months ago
    
    Thanks Nancy. For a title I was thinking “It’s time for profitable decision making in your business”
    - NancyChen
      2 years, 4 months ago
      
      Donna, I think that the arguments that you make so strongly to follow are too compelling, and almost demand, a hookier title. Let yourself get passionate about your topic, which you clearly are, and see what comes out :-D! ?How to make your numbers your best friend vs. your worst enemy? Stop sweeping the financial truth of your business under the…Read More
      
      DonnaDube
      2 years, 4 months ago
      
      Nancy, thanks for your kind words.. love your suggestions.. I will have some fun with it and see what I can come up with. Titles are obviously not my strong point! On a side note, I would be happy to chat with you further if you wish, no need to wait till you hit $200K!
      
      KerstinPeters
      2 years, 4 months ago
      
      Very clear and compelling, Donna. I have a similar problem with titles.
- JoelElfman
  2 years, 3 months ago
  
  Donna, really good.
  I would consider flipping “Are you ready to dump uncertain guesswork and start making profitable decisions in your business?, to “Are you ready to start making profitable decisions in your business, and dump uncertain guesswork?
  And I would also consider, again switching the CTA around, “Book a call with me and let’s make…Read More
  - DonnaDube
    2 years, 3 months ago
    
    Thanks Joel for your thoughts! I like your suggestions.
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