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Brenda Uekert

• 2 years ago

Feedback welcome. This one is for my Gutsy Women Finances community.

Here’s a major reason why you continue to struggle with money, even though you have a decent income.

You weren’t taught a thing about how to manage your money growing up. Now you don’t know where to start and you haven’t found anyone you can really trust to guide you o…Read More

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- Annette Presley
  2 years ago
  
  I like it. But, there is a disconnect for me between the quiz and the community. You say this is for your Gutsy community but then you start the story with the quiz and the CTA is about taking the quiz, not joining a community. There isn’t any context for the community when you talk about it in the story. I would say this piece is about getting…Read More
  - Brenda Uekert
    2 years ago
    
    Thanks Annette. Perhaps the key is to work on two separate pieces – quiz and community. I’ll see what I can work up.
- Shannon
  2 years ago
  
  Brenda – great job diving in and taking action. Woohoo!
- JoelElfman
  2 years ago
  
  Hi Brenda,
  I love the opening.
  And I think you have a wonderful story about Madison & the club.
  Did Madison take the quiz before or after she joined Gutsy Women Club? Your mention of some of the things you did w/ her made me curious. Are the exercises and your instructions part of the Club something different? What do I get from the club if I…Read More
  - Brenda Uekert
    2 years ago
    
    Thanks, Joel. I’m going to separate the quiz from the GWF community. That should make things a whole lot clearer.
Annette Presley

• 2 years ago

would love some feedback. Is it compelling?

Here is a key reason your hormones are behaving badly, even though you are eating a healthy diet and taking DIM.

Your minerals are out of whack. You have too much iron and not enough copper.
What do I mean by that?

None of us wants to bust our butt at the gym, eat kale, and take a boatload of…Read More

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- Brenda Uekert
  2 years ago
  
  taking DIM? It’s a powerful story. Not sure you need this at the end – (which are BIG issues costing you time, money, joy, and your sanity). You’ve unearthed those pieces in your story.
  - Annette Presley
    2 years ago
    
    Thanks! I’ll take that out. DIM is a common supplement, but I might need to think of something else to put there.
- JoelElfman
  2 years ago
  
  instead of taking DIM, you can just mention supplements in general. Plus, DIM & DM are somewhat similar, someone skimming might not pay enough attention.
Brenda Uekert

• 2 years ago

I’d love some feedback on this:

Here’s a major reason why you keep starting the new year under a cloud of money worries.

You’re getting sucked into the holiday shopping frenzy and you’re not planning ahead.

Let me explain. None of us wants to start the new year feeling like it will take forever just to “catch up” from our holiday…Read More

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- Annette Presley
  2 years ago
  
  I like this a lot. I just have a few suggestions for tightening it a bit.
  
  This isn’t a big deal but I don’t think the question mark works. “Yet each November, you get geared up for Black Friday and all the super discounts. Maybe you’re even hunting down deals before you carve into the Thanksgiving turkey and before you know it, you’ve got p…Read More
  - Brenda Uekert
    2 years ago
    
    Wow, Annette! Thanks so much. I made the changes.
    - Annette Presley
      2 years ago
      
      You’re welcome!
AimeeRussell

• 2 years ago

My thought leader content…
Does this make you feel like buying?

Here is the key reason why your hair is dull and lifeless even though you take care of your hair with quality hair products.

It’s because you have metal and mineral build-up and your hair could use a detox!

It’s frustrating to spend lots of money on quality, pro…Read More

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- Brenda Uekert
  2 years ago
  
  Aimee, Not sure I’d go into the specific elements. And I’m not sure how your product can counteract the water issue. I really have no idea what goes into a hair detoxing session, but maybe your audience does?
  - AimeeRussell
    2 years ago
    
    Thank you so much Brenda! I appreciate your feedback. I plan to use an image with the minerals and metals that are most harmful to the hair with a small explanation of the damage they cause to the hair. As well as a before and after photo of a client’s detox session. I would love to hear your thoughts on those visuals.
- Annette Presley
  2 years ago
  
  I agree with Brenda about not using the specific elements. Do you have a story about someone who did the detox and how fabulous their hair was?
  
  For the first sentence I’d say, “Here is the key reason your hair is dull and lifeless even though you use high quality hair products.”
  
  “You have heavy metal and mineral build-up.”
  
  What do I mean by…Read More
  - AimeeRussell
    2 years ago
    
    This is soooooo helpful, thank you so much Annette. I prefer short and swet, but I’m learning that it doesn’t need to be like that all the time.
    - Annette Presley
      2 years ago
      
      You’re welcome!
BethShenton

• 2 years ago

Missing today’s session, look forward to diving in next week 🙂

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- Shannon
  2 years ago
  
  We missed you! <3
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