Hello Joel, I like that you described most of your benefits in a positive way, maybe you could also rewrite the first benefit: Establish More Balance and Calmness (or something similar)? I would move the words around in your CTA: Schedule a Clarity Call, and learn how the 12-week BodyHypnosis Program can improve your life.

OK – what is the call to action here?

I think it is brilliant, flows wonderfully. A few small take outs to tighten in up.. and off it goes:

DANG IT – the friggin strike throughs won’t show up in here. SO here it is with stuff just deleted:

Almost all of my life I’ve sat uneasily on an uneven 3 legged stool, wobbling back & forth between a wild imagination, physical activities a…Read More

I tightened it a little, so here’s my version:

For most of my life I’ve sat uneasily on a 3 legged stool, wobbling back & forth between a wild imagination, physical activities, and the expectations of others or society.

⁃ As a young boy, I did Modern Dance, until it didn’t seem like the thing a boy should be doing.

⁃ I was a voracious reader…Read More

Posted on FB, LinkedIn, & is the new About page for my website

I love the end. If Change is calling, book a call. ❤️

Wow I love it – easy to read – great flow!

Joel – this is clear and concise – good job. I wouldn’t say “if so join my …” because you are then asking them for a consult. See how that may feel like a mixed message to your peeps? You might say something like: If this sounds like what you are experiencing, you may benefit from program called xyz. See the difference?

Hi Joel, I am curious about how the approach and content of the process you use with clients might affect your Bold Q’s: hypnosis, coaching, plus other tools,etc? How might YOUR ideal client differ from, say, a generic life-coaching client? If you were to add one qualifier for YOU, to filter IN only those prospects who might go for YOUR Sig…Read More