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Hey everyone! I took a stab at writing an email with the behind the scenes content and I’d love some feedback. I am not sure exactly how to tie in the CTA. I feel like it kind of sneaks up on you and needs a better transition. The topic is Travel and the hook is a question. Thanks!
Here is the email:
Title: How can getting your finances…Read More
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Thanks for sharing your love of travel, Sara. I love to travel too! May I make two suggestions?
Get specific and sensory. It’s the little details that spark engagement and presence you. Today I’m thinking back to a trip to Venice we made on our honeymoon. I remember the heat and the orange glow of the molten glass in the glass-blowing workshop on…Read More -
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I see how you feel you have dumped all the engagement at the end. What if you sprinkle it throughout and bold it so people see it.
Title: How can getting your finances organized free you from FOMO?I’m not sure if you know this about me, but I love to travel. I do it any chance that I get. From a weekend spa getaway to a trip to a new city – I’m…Read More
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All our written Content Personality types. I loved this video and thought many of you could do something similar with our work from this last month. ❤️
https://www.facebook.com/megantuoheyrelationships/videos/3198730023606409/?extid=CL-UNK-UNK-UNK-IOS_GK0T-GK1C&mibextid=2Rb1fB![Profile Photo]()
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Here are mine!
Fun facts that people won’t see on my resume:
1. Lived abroad in Europe for 4 years and my first child was born there.2. I once visited 14 countries in 21 days.
3. I’m a big sci-fi and fantasy nerd. (thanks for this idea, @bodymindhypnoticgmail-com)!
3 reasons to work with me:
1. I owned my own business as a hea…Read More10 Comments-
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Where in Europe was your child born? (think smaller when it comes to messaging to create a stronger connection)
I’m a big sci-fi and fantasy nerd, and my ultimate love is —character or movie or something deeper-
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Helpful feedback – thanks!
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I lived abroad in Europe for 4 years – 2 in London where my daughter was born and then we moved to Paris for 2 years. It’s not as romantic with an infant 🙂
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Indeed – Paris with a child is a different experience (the tube, in particular, is not infant friendly AT all)…
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It most certainly is not! The good thing was that she was an infant at the time and I was able to use a baby carrier but it was tough!
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I’m a big sci-fi and fantasy nerd, and my ultimate love are (is?) fiction books about magic. I’m sure I had supernatural powers in a past life.
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love all of these. I like how relatable your reasons for working with you are.
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Thanks!
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Love the facts. Great simple, clear reasons. I was definitely curious about where in Europe she was born. I am a huge sci-fi/fantasy reader so we will have to chat at some point.
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Would love that!
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KerstinPeters is with JoelElfman and 3 others
We will be meeting again tomorrow morning. Everyone is welcome to join.
Topic: Friday Brainstorming Meeting
Time: Mar 10, 2023 10:30 Eastern Time (US and Canada)
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Do you want to create deeper connections while travelling to Germany, Austria or Switzerland?
Even if you only have basic German skills, these will open lots of doors because the German speakers you meet will be impressed with your efforts to communicate with them in their language and will go the extra mile for you.
Are you looking for an…Read More
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Very compelling!
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This is great Kerstin. For #2 could you maybe mention that they may just make some new friends too? It seems to me like the service you offer is a great way to help people connect with people in those countries on a deeper level.
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Great suggestion. Thank you, Jackie.
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I think these are great reasons to take your course!
I would just change the first paragraph a little to “Even basic German skills will open lots of doors…”
Maybe you could make the points non questions. So, they should take your course so they can: Create deeper connections while traveling, Immerse yourself in the culture to get a truly…Read More
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Thank you for the suggestions, Annette. I will try out both options and compare the reactions.
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Well done! Neither of your CTAs bothered me. I would have preferred the first one (Want to hear more about that?…) in parentheses, but it works as is. I bet others will have tips about how to smooth those transitions, but to me they worked well.