JessicaPetter

Amy Civica

• 2 years, 4 months ago

Hi lovelies!
I am working on my vision statement. I am working off of my Universal Truth: Embracing your emotional relationship with food heals your mind, body and soul.

The Mission:
We believe creating awareness around your (a, the?) relationship with food can heal the world.

I am struggling with ” your, a, the” also is “the world” too broad?

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- AmyHager
  2 years, 4 months ago
  
  I would keep it ‘your’. What you do is very personal.
  How does our relationship with food help heal the world? It is too broad the way it is written now. Why is this important?
- TanyaEasterling
  2 years, 4 months ago
  
  I agree with Amy, if your vision is around the “your” your mission should be too. (“Embracing your…” and creating awareness around you…”) It’s more personal. I also don’t think world here is too broad. If one person at a time can be healed / have awarenesss around food then essentially you’re healing the world, just one person at a time 🙂
  - Amy Civica
    2 years, 4 months ago
    
    Thank you Tanya
- KerstinPeters
  2 years, 4 months ago
  
  I would leave the “your” but I am not clear how the personal awareness about food is healing the world.
KerstinPeters

• 2 years, 5 months ago

Direct Offer Email:

Guten Tag, NAME,

Do you want to become an engaged participant in German conversations?

I know how intimidating it is to learn and speak a new language from my own experiences. I did not dare to talk to people when I immigrated to Canada. I was so afraid everyone would think I was stupid because I could not express…Read More

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- AmyHager
  2 years, 5 months ago
  
  How did this go? I know you had it scheduled for after class. Do you have a link so we can see how it was laid out?
  - KerstinPeters
    2 years, 5 months ago
    
    Hi Amy, Here is the link to my newsletter: https://mailchi.mp/973bea04b7a5/german-news-5238392. I also posted it on my Facebook wall and shared it to my page and group. I had one comment and a couple of likes to the post. No response from the email.
    - KerstinPeters
      2 years, 5 months ago
      
      I will use the same template to promote my upcoming Facebook challenge this week. I will add FB lives to the mix to promote the event.
NancyChen

• 2 years, 5 months ago

DIRECT OFFER EMAIL – Draft 1
Used the magic word, “repeatable”!
Comments invited!

Hello ,

Do you want to build more influence at work so that you can reach your goals?

If so, I would like to work with you in my PILOT Leadership Program designed for Asian women. This group program delivers the same system that has transformed many…Read More

4 Comments
- NancyChen
  2 years, 5 months ago
  
  Forgot the title: CAN BEING ASIAN SABOTAGE YOUR CAREER?
- AmyHager
  2 years, 5 months ago
  
  I would remove the word PILOT. You know what you are doing and you can help these women. Adding Pilot makes this seem like it isn’t real. Like you are experimenting and not the leader you really are.
  The special benefits – like bonus coaching – is something that you can gift people once they are in. The feedback will happen because you build…Read More
  - NancyChen
    2 years, 5 months ago
    
    Thanks for your feedback, Amy – it’s making more sense to me now.
- JoelElfman
  2 years, 5 months ago
  
  Nice work Nancy.
  
  CAN BEING ASIAN SABOTAGE YOUR CAREER? (Not crazy about this title. Is this about their DNA, their cultural beliefs or others beliefs about Asians. Which one or ones are you addressing)
  
  I would make sure you hammer home, Who this is for, Asian woman, and Why, cultural heritage. Make sure they feel this is tailored to them, and…Read More
KerstinPeters

• 2 years, 5 months ago

Here are the results from taking part in my Summer Conversation Sessions:
1) You will become more comfortable and confident speaking German to be an engaged participant in conversations.
2) You will increase your vocabulary for small talk and feel part of the conversations.
3) You will connect and practice with other learners to feel supported…Read More

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- Annette Presley
  2 years, 5 months ago
  
  For #1 I’d maybe say You will comfortably and confidently engage in conversations with those who speak German.
  - KerstinPeters
    2 years, 5 months ago
    
    Thanks, Annette.
KerstinPeters

• 2 years, 6 months ago

Here is the draft for my BOLD qualifiers. I would love your feedback.

Imagine you travel to Germany and can start a conversation with a native speaker without a translator. Think about how it feels when you communicate to get to know someone. Maybe, you remember a situation when a foreigner addressed you in your mother tongue. How did it…Read More

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- AmyHager
  2 years, 6 months ago
  
  you are ready to have fun and commit to actively participating in the programme, – instead of mentioning actively participating in the program… what is the results they get from having fun and actively participating?
  Or try you are ready to have fun and commit to actively grow your German vocabulary
  - KerstinPeters
    2 years, 6 months ago
    
    Only when they are ready to participate will they learn to speak the language. Students often learn lots of vocabulary and worry about grammar but forget that the purpose of learning a language is to speak it.
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