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Hi lovelies!
I am working on my vision statement. I am working off of my Universal Truth: Embracing your emotional relationship with food heals your mind, body and soul.The Mission:
We believe creating awareness around your (a, the?) relationship with food can heal the world.I am struggling with ” your, a, the” also is “the world” too broad?
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I agree with Amy, if your vision is around the “your” your mission should be too. (“Embracing your…” and creating awareness around you…”) It’s more personal. I also don’t think world here is too broad. If one person at a time can be healed / have awarenesss around food then essentially you’re healing the world, just one person at a time 🙂
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Thank you Tanya
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I would leave the “your” but I am not clear how the personal awareness about food is healing the world.
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After a few trials and already getting feedback (THANK YOU) still feels off… I think i just feel off LOL
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Hi @amyttravs-com – I like this version much better! Good job. Let’s get it sent out and see what happens. Will you also tweak this for a FB/LI post?
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Oh yes – The FB/LI is much easier cuz I know who is engaged there 😉 And will post it to all my groups that always ask to post offers and I am a paid member of, etc….
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Really Good, I would recommend a few changes.
(((I think this is a minor flip but a little clearer))) “So far this year we have been learning from Retreat Leaders Live interviews. Been bringing your retreat plan into reality during our Dreaming in the Daylight, and I have been working with dozens of transformational leaders to build their r…Read More
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Again – I so appreciate your insight!!!!
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I love the end. If Change is calling, book a call. ❤️
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Wow I love it – easy to read – great flow!
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Joel – this is clear and concise – good job. I wouldn’t say “if so join my …” because you are then asking them for a consult. See how that may feel like a mixed message to your peeps? You might say something like: If this sounds like what you are experiencing, you may benefit from program called xyz. See the difference?
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Thanks Shannon, I will include the change
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How did this go? I know you had it scheduled for after class. Do you have a link so we can see how it was laid out?
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Hi Amy, Here is the link to my newsletter: https://mailchi.mp/973bea04b7a5/german-news-5238392. I also posted it on my Facebook wall and shared it to my page and group. I had one comment and a couple of likes to the post. No response from the email.
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I will use the same template to promote my upcoming Facebook challenge this week. I will add FB lives to the mix to promote the event.
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I think it sounds great!
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Thanks Annette! I appreciate you taking the time to read it through.
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Yes this is so good!!
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Thanks Sue! Appreciate it.
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Hi Donna, this is reading tight and strong; good work, Any ideas for a grabby TITLE?
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Thanks Nancy. For a title I was thinking “It’s time for profitable decision making in your business”
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Donna, I think that the arguments that you make so strongly to follow are too compelling, and almost demand, a hookier title. Let yourself get passionate about your topic, which you clearly are, and see what comes out :-D! ?How to make your numbers your best friend vs. your worst enemy? Stop sweeping the financial truth of your business under the…Read More-
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Nancy, thanks for your kind words.. love your suggestions.. I will have some fun with it and see what I can come up with. Titles are obviously not my strong point! On a side note, I would be happy to chat with you further if you wish, no need to wait till you hit $200K!
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Very clear and compelling, Donna. I have a similar problem with titles.
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Donna, really good.
I would consider flipping “Are you ready to dump uncertain guesswork and start making profitable decisions in your business?, to “Are you ready to start making profitable decisions in your business, and dump uncertain guesswork?
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Thanks Joel for your thoughts! I like your suggestions.
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I would keep it ‘your’. What you do is very personal.
How does our relationship with food help heal the world? It is too broad the way it is written now. Why is this important?