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After a few trials and already getting feedback (THANK YOU) still feels off… I think i just feel off LOL
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Where has 2022 gone? Too fast for me. So far this year we have been learning from Retreat Leaders Live interviews. Been Dreaming in the Daylight -…Read More
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Oh yes – The FB/LI is much easier cuz I know who is engaged there 😉 And will post it to all my groups that always ask to post offers and I am a paid member of, etc….
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Really Good, I would recommend a few changes.
(((I think this is a minor flip but a little clearer))) “So far this year we have been learning from Retreat Leaders Live interviews. Been bringing your retreat plan into reality during our Dreaming in the Daylight, and I have been working with dozens of transformational leaders to build their r…Read More
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Again – I so appreciate your insight!!!!
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I love the end. If Change is calling, book a call. ❤️
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Wow I love it – easy to read – great flow!
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Joel – this is clear and concise – good job. I wouldn’t say “if so join my …” because you are then asking them for a consult. See how that may feel like a mixed message to your peeps? You might say something like: If this sounds like what you are experiencing, you may benefit from program called xyz. See the difference?
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Thanks Shannon, I will include the change
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Do you want to become an engaged participant in German conversations?
I know how intimidating it is to learn and speak a new language from my own experiences. I did not dare to talk to people when I immigrated to Canada. I was so afraid everyone would think I was stupid because I could not express…Read More
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How did this go? I know you had it scheduled for after class. Do you have a link so we can see how it was laid out?
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Hi Amy, Here is the link to my newsletter: https://mailchi.mp/973bea04b7a5/german-news-5238392. I also posted it on my Facebook wall and shared it to my page and group. I had one comment and a couple of likes to the post. No response from the email.
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I will use the same template to promote my upcoming Facebook challenge this week. I will add FB lives to the mix to promote the event.
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Used the magic word, “repeatable”!
Comments invited!Hello ,
Do you want to build more influence at work so that you can reach your goals?
If so, I would like to work with you in my PILOT Leadership Program designed for Asian women. This group program delivers the same system that has transformed many…Read More
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Forgot the title: CAN BEING ASIAN SABOTAGE YOUR CAREER?
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I would remove the word PILOT. You know what you are doing and you can help these women. Adding Pilot makes this seem like it isn’t real. Like you are experimenting and not the leader you really are.
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Thanks for your feedback, Amy – it’s making more sense to me now.
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Nice work Nancy.
CAN BEING ASIAN SABOTAGE YOUR CAREER? (Not crazy about this title. Is this about their DNA, their cultural beliefs or others beliefs about Asians. Which one or ones are you addressing)
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Here are the results from taking part in my Summer Conversation Sessions:
1) You will become more comfortable and confident speaking German to be an engaged participant in conversations.
2) You will increase your vocabulary for small talk and feel part of the conversations.
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For #1 I’d maybe say You will comfortably and confidently engage in conversations with those who speak German.
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Thanks, Annette.
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Hi @amyttravs-com – I like this version much better! Good job. Let’s get it sent out and see what happens. Will you also tweak this for a FB/LI post?