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Hello Joel, I like that you described most of your benefits in a positive way, maybe you could also rewrite the first benefit: Establish More Balance and Calmness (or something similar)? I would move the words around in your CTA: Schedule a Clarity Call, and learn how the 12-week BodyHypnosis Program can improve your life.

I like this overall Kerstin, short and to the point. I wonder if you could include something that confirms I do not need to be an “artist” to enjoy this course, and also something to encourage me if I know absolutely “no German” now. Just to clarify who this program is for in a bit more detail.

I like this a lot. It does feel a little cut & dry. May get a little granular. How does the class have fun. Is there a particular fun exercise that you do, would it be okay to mention something about it. I’m wondering if any of your students have some funny stories about a situation where their conversational skill came in handy. Getting…Read More

I feel like this might be too long and could be more concise. I don’t think you need to use the word pilot because it makes it sound like you are creating a blueprint for a pilot program not necessarily a business.

I am not fond of the word architect. It’s not relatable and architecting something doesn’t sound simple or easy. I think design,…Read More

I agree with Annette. I would replace the word architect with create or design because you want your plan to be flexible and unique and not strict and without any tolerances. I would use the word pilot in a subtitle.
Design Your Custom TinyBiz Blueprint – a four-week pilot program to downshift your business to have more time, attention, and…Read More

Great advice from Annette and Kerstin. You do not need to say it is pilot program. It is a four-week program.

“Tame your wild hormones” is a how – it’s not something I know I want.

Maybe change up “If you are…” to “Are you…” so the reader seems more engaged and giving you yesses along the way.

Again in the benefits, causing my hormones to behave badly is a how. Foods and habits causing sleeplessness, brain fog, irritability… those are things I…Read More

Re: “Tame your wild hormones” – i hear what @karen is saying above about it being a “how” and yet – so many of us hear “it’s your hormones” – I think it has become common vernacular for women to blame “everything” on their “hormones”. I like it!!! Maybe it’s at the end – you will help them “tame them”….

I feel like your Number 3 point should actually be your title! There is more excitement in that. My recommendation is to move this “Do you need social interactions? are you bored? do you have zoom fatigue? Then this is the beginning –” to the title
and leave this “Join this Entry level course to Argentine Tango your first step to fun!” as the l…Read More

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