I love how clean this page feels, and the graphic you have of the two head really feels like tangled to smooth! I also love the title of your LCT. Most of your page seems to be clear on who it is for and how this helps. The only part I was not sure about was this: My ultimate mission is to empower women-owned small businesses and entrepreneurs to…Read More

Hi @carriewulfdenprofessionalsolutions-com – good job. LOVE the graphic at the top and the promise/transformation of the resource. I did get lost on the page, there is a lot going on there. What can be SIMPLIFIED and removed? And remember a landing page has no other menu items/social icons, CTA on the page. I’m including a link to our landing page…Read More

Hey Carrie, for some reason the order still feels off to me and it didn’t feel like there was any urgency. Lots of business owners will deprioritize systems until their hair is on fire (IKYK)… so connecting the outcome they want with the work you do and why putting it off is a poor choice feels important.

I pulled the in structure from what…Read More

I like it Carrie. The only thing I would add is… “I hope to speak with you soon!” doesn’t sound like an invitation. (in sales we have to ASK for the order). What’s the next step or action you want them to take after this?

Hey Carrie, I feel like the connection between your values and the purpose of the resource could be stronger. It took me a few reads to get what you were going for, and I still feel like I’m reading between the lines.

Specifically, I wouldn’t repeat the title in the first sentence. I would use the brass tacks description you have at the end but…Read More

I like this piece. Enjoyed learning that about you. I would just like to be clear though, who is your audience?

Your passion and deterination to figure out how to help your daughter definitely translates into your passion for helping your clients, and your interest in getting to know them and their needs so you can best support them too. I loved these lines: I understand your frustration if your programs are all over the…Read More

I love this – SO relatable! Great job on the content and drawing the parallels. Well done. I know your subject line scored high, but it’s best to have 3-5 words max in subject and preview lines. Might want to reconsider that?

Great!!!