Hi Joel, will you have a visual that goes with the text?

Hi Joel! Wonder if using simpler, conversational words would make your piece even more powerful? Win over vs trumps; power through, knee jerk reactions vs anticipatory. Simplify and tighten it up perhaps? Also, perhaps refining your viewpoint; often willpower can only get you so far; then what? Seriously, consider HYPNOSIS — and why? FACT:…Read More

Hi Kerstin, This is very simple and clear. I would consider opening w/ Fact 2, and moving Fact 1 down, German is easy. For Fact 3, you might consider taking out that grammar is the hard part and stay w/ logical. And I would switch the last sentence around to emphasis, you can start speaking w/ others, even w/o perfect grammar. I think it makes a…Read More

Hi Kerstin, what if you try to shorten and simplify each Fact so that a 12-year old can understand it quickly — that’s the average reading comprehension of us here in the US anyway. Perhaps a version that is less academic/intellectual may be more powerful and to the point?

Joel – who are your Zoom Mates this month in your pod? You’ll want to tag them so they can review this and give feedback!

Hello Joel, I am one of your Zoom Mates. For the title, I would prefer Is Willpower the Best Motivator/Motivation for Change? I can relate to the fact that you present and find them compelling to try hypnosis. Fact 1: I would use nouns for all reasons. Fact 2, I would add the horse as an example to visualize what you mean. Let’s imagine a horse…Read More

Maybe make the Myth an erroneous statement to make it more catchy. Like “You have to go through the misery of white-knuckling-it to change your life.”

Hi Kerstin, I liked your video. The last part about practicing with a partner and the cultural aspects felt the strongest. Maybe an example here or elsewhere would have been a nice add, but a very good job regardless.