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Ann Becks

• 7 months ago

DIRECT OFFER POST- love your feedback. Struggling with HOOKS.

Women, have you LOST your SELF?

I was on a call this morning with a nurse who REALLY wants to stop the cycles of burnout she’s been in.

She said, “I feel like I’ve lost myself”, and wept. 🥺 Oh, I felt her pain and my heart ached for her. 💔

But this isn’t an unusual e…Read More

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- Veronica (Vee) Drake
  7 months ago
  
  I wish I knew copy better to help you – let me sit with this
  - Ann Becks
    7 months ago
    
    Vee, I absolutely love how real you are!! 😁
- Dan Lewis
  7 months ago
  
  Love this, Ann!
  Feels like the immediate jump to losing yourself is a little too abrupt. Perhaps move that line. Does the following work for you?
  
  . . . .
  I was on a call this morning with a nurse who REALLY wants to stop the cycles of burnout she’s been in. [add a detail or two to make this person and her burnout more concrete.]
  
  She summed i…Read More
  - Ann Becks
    7 months ago
    
    ooo, thank you Dan! I appreciate this feedback! And thanks for the badassity link!😁
- CarrieWulf
  7 months ago
  
  Ann – what if you add a testimonial from someone who has experienced a major shift?
  - Ann Becks
    6 months, 4 weeks ago
    
    That’s a great idea. Thanks Carrie!
Dan Lewis

• 7 months ago

Doesn’t meet the criteria of this month’s topic, but I wanted to share a great client story that demonstrates my expertise. (Show it, don’t tell it!)

Badassity can come in deceptive packages.

“I’m just a little old lady that likes to write,” were among the first words out of Sue’s mouth on our brand discovery call.

True statement –…Read More

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- Ann Becks
  7 months ago
  
  Dan, this speaks directly to your expertise. The things you draw our attention to, isn’t stuff most of us would notice consciously or know. I found myself going back to the photo to see what I’d missed on my first pass. I also love this line: “Badassity can come in deceptive packages.” 😁 One question… I don’t quite understand what “hard, hard”…Read More
  - Dan Lewis
    7 months ago
    
    Thanks, Ann! I’m not 100% good on that line in the photo. Sue writes in a genre called “hard science fiction”, meaning it’s grounded in actual science. She’s a stickler for that. I was also looking for a line that would contrast with Sue’s little-old-lady physicality. Thanks for your thoughtful feedback!
    - Ann Becks
      7 months ago
      
      oh! cool!! And I love the contrast you pointed out… “little old lady” with “hard”.
- Veronica (Vee) Drake
  7 months ago
  
  brilliant!
  - Dan Lewis
    7 months ago
    
    Thanks, Veronica!
Veronica (Vee) Drake

• 7 months, 1 week ago

I need some feedback, please..
this is my new homepage/lead magnet. Please let me know this speaks to you
The Intuitive Incubator for Women Business Owners.
Where Networking and Masterminding Unite!

Welcome to The Intuitive Incubator a group specifically for women business owners who are a lil bit woo and recognize the importance of…Read More

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- Ann Becks
  7 months ago
  
  Veronica, I love this: The Intuitive Incubator for Women Business Owners. Where Networking and Masterminding Unite! It sounds “juicy”, intriguing.
  
  And this is super clear:
  Welcome to The Intuitive Incubator a group specifically for women business owners who are a lil bit woo and recognize the importance of spirituality and intuition when it…Read More
  - Veronica (Vee) Drake
    7 months ago
    
    photo just here for fun
    - Ann Becks
      7 months ago
      
      😂 got it!
- Shannon
  7 months ago
  
  @vdrake123gmail-com — super clear copy and tells me who it is for and what they will experience. I’d love an invite!
CarrieWulf

• 7 months, 1 week ago

Differentiator:
SPARK streamlines your tech and processes to increase your capacity to contribute to social impact programs, and support causes you are passionate about.

Subject Line: I just wanted you to know… (85% on monster insights headline optimizer)
Preview Text: How will you feel in a month?

Hey [Name]!

A few months ago, I got a…Read More

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- Ann Becks
  7 months ago
  
  Hey Carrie! One thing I’m curious about is the nature of the decisions she was making that contibuted to her stress? Is it possible to capture how you help impact decisioning making?
  - CarrieWulf
    7 months ago
    
    What if I said, “Decision Fatigue – She made so many decisions daily because she didn’t trust her team enough, and analysis paralysis began to creep in.
    - Shannon
      7 months ago
      
      @carriewulfdenprofessionalsolutions-com – yes great clarifying example here. Great job on this email Carrie!
Anthea Mumby

• 7 months, 1 week ago

Hi everyone, great to join my first call yesterday. I’m starting to think about my email marketing approach and have a couple of things I wanted to ask. 1) Has anyone got a fabulous onboarding email nurture campaign or a template they would be willing to share? I’m looking for inspo! 2) Has anyone in the group moved people from a Linked…Read More

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- CarrieWulf
  7 months, 1 week ago
  
  Hi Anthea! I am not sure if we are able to shift followers from our LI newsletter to one sent from our own CRM. I suppose you could do an email scrape and manually pull their emails from LI, but adding them to your own CRM without them opting in is a bit sketchy since they didn’t agree to be added to your list. BUT you could add a link to optin to…Read More
  - Anthea Mumby
    7 months, 1 week ago
    
    Thanks Carrie – yes I like the idea of adding the optin to my LI newsletter.
- Veronica (Vee) Drake
  7 months, 1 week ago
  
  LI not my fav. sorry. As for a welcome series Im happy to share mine BUT its very tailored to me and my voice.. interested?
- Shannon
  7 months ago
  
  @antheadreamteamconsulting-ca – hi! Lead people from your LI NL to your email list with an optin, workshop, lead magnet, etc. Let them help each other!
ThiaPierson changed their profile picture

• 7 months, 1 week ago

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ThiaPierson

• 7 months, 1 week ago

I feel like I’ve been drinking from a fire hose. I am launching my practice/programs – this week!! The site is live and I am working on my first marketing. I have learned so much from Amy and Shannon!
This is my home work from last week. I will take it and tweak it into a social media post.
I would love your input, feedback and…Read More

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- CarrieWulf
  7 months, 1 week ago
  
  First, I LOVE your sign-off! After reading your email, I’m still not sure what you do/are offering. What type of coaching is this? I would want to assume life coaching, but you know what assuming can lead to (ass/u/me). You state that you founded your business to be a resource, but that feels vague to me. Format-wise, it looks good, but I would…Read More
  - ThiaPierson
    7 months, 1 week ago
    
    This is great feedback! Thank you!
- Veronica (Vee) Drake
  7 months, 1 week ago
  
  WHOA. Effervescently….LOVE I’m a bit confused. partly b/c I have the attention span of an ant. I felt for me it was too much. Hope this is helpful. xo
  - ThiaPierson
    7 months ago
    
    Thank you! all feedback is helpful!
- Shannon
  7 months ago
  
  @thia-h-piersongmail-com – great suggestions above. I agree that I’m not clear on what the offer is. So spend some time spelling that out step by step for yourself – so you can talk about it with authority and specificity. Also, please remember to make your text blocks “less dense”. People are reading emails from phones – and therefore (to my…Read More
Claire Peltier

• 7 months, 1 week ago

Hi all, here is my content on what I do differently . I aim to send it as a newsletter to start with .
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How to find (and use) your inner power ?

Dear all,

Isn’t it time to find and use your very own inner power, your unique way through life ?

not what you have been taught, not what you believe, not what you have been told to u…Read More

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AmyHager

• 7 months, 2 weeks ago

Have a great couple of weeks and I will be back for week 3. Don’t forget to go to the calendar to get the codes to register for the newsletter workshop March 20 and Lead Magnet workshop in April for free. ❤️

Remember if you post content on the wall, go to the two below your post and read. Ask curious questions if you don’t feel clear when…Read More

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Sam Brabender

• 7 months, 2 weeks ago

Is there a way of accessing the handout/template you referred to today in the call?

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- AmyHager
  7 months, 2 weeks ago
  
  Go to the session the next day and you will see the replay with the notes: https://contentpersonalityclub.com/courses/march-2024/
  
  Our goal is always to have it up on Thursday. If there might be a delay, we will let you know. But I just checked and everything is there waiting for you. ❤️
  - Sam Brabender
    7 months, 1 week ago
    
    awesome thanks!
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