I like it Carrie. The only thing I would add is… “I hope to speak with you soon!” doesn’t sound like an invitation. (in sales we have to ASK for the order). What’s the next step or action you want them to take after this?

Hey Carrie, I feel like the connection between your values and the purpose of the resource could be stronger. It took me a few reads to get what you were going for, and I still feel like I’m reading between the lines.

Specifically, I wouldn’t repeat the title in the first sentence. I would use the brass tacks description you have at the end but…Read More

OMGosh I love this piece. Thought provking – well done! Did you roll this out? What happened?

@clientsmshannonhernandez-com @amymshannonhernandez-com my one concern about this piece – and I would love to hear your thoughts….is the idea that IF I am saying I helped others (without taking the credit or helping myself) and then offer to help others…..it seems like more of the same (*shrug emoji) I guess I am not clear how to say that I…Read More

I like this piece. Enjoyed learning that about you. I would just like to be clear though, who is your audience?

I like this a lot! I think your hook could be: Is there a time you had to challenge your own assumptions? And then you go into the story as it is written. I do not see your CTA or transition at the end. what do you want them to do after reading this?

I like that you shared the science behind the product, but I am missing the transition and what you want me to do next.

Insight of the day. I am tired of dealing with amateurs wrapped up in scarcity thinking.

Love the visual charisma. Stopped me in my tracks and made me think.

With this shift – here is the messaging upgrades I see: 1) Brand Illumination Photographer (one title – tighten it up). In your “I Help statement”: be sure to say “veteran or established” this will weed out a lot of the scarcity and all in your fish! 3) CTA: Schedule Your Brand Illumination Session Today 4) I think your WHAT here is actually…Read More

@sarasarafins-com I could be your Level 5 client… so here’s my thoughts: “simple” is a word that I love wrt finances. The thing I’m struggling with now is navigating QuickBooks. Agh. Simplicity and not getting myself “tied in knots” is what I’d be looking for… time saving is a very close second. I think your main content is spot on. The other…Read More

I agree with Ann. I love simple. Every year I say I will change but the set up is too overwhelming so i dont and stick with my own system. Being reminded of the time savings in the future would be attractive. However the thought in my head is..every minute spent on analysis is a minute not spent on growing my business so it needs to be quick. Hope…Read More

Hi @annannbecks-co – the ‘reclaim yourself’ subtitle doesn’t resonate with me. It feels murky. I’m not sure what that means. Can you use different wording there? I like the rest of it. The title feels clear and I like that different levels of assessment will lead to different suggestions/outcomes.

Reverse your path to Burnout: Get clarity on your ONE next step to reclaim yourself.

i like the title because it reminds me of what could happen…but I agree with sara about the word reclaim. how about changing it to protect?

Welcome!

welcome! i am a newbie too. Hope you are getting some sleep

Hi @antheadreamteamconsulting-ca – I like it! Is there something specific you would like feedback on?

I like how you tied this month’s theme of your past experience so well to an event. Good invitation email. Another engagement question you could ask is: How has your past experiences influenced who you are today a business owner? Reply and tell me your story.

this sounds so inviting