I like it Carrie. The only thing I would add is… “I hope to speak with you soon!” doesn’t sound like an invitation. (in sales we have to ASK for the order). What’s the next step or action you want them to take after this?

Hey Carrie, I feel like the connection between your values and the purpose of the resource could be stronger. It took me a few reads to get what you were going for, and I still feel like I’m reading between the lines.

Specifically, I wouldn’t repeat the title in the first sentence. I would use the brass tacks description you have at the end but…Read More

I like this piece. Enjoyed learning that about you. I would just like to be clear though, who is your audience?

Your passion and deterination to figure out how to help your daughter definitely translates into your passion for helping your clients, and your interest in getting to know them and their needs so you can best support them too. I loved these lines: I understand your frustration if your programs are all over the…Read More

I love this – SO relatable! Great job on the content and drawing the parallels. Well done. I know your subject line scored high, but it’s best to have 3-5 words max in subject and preview lines. Might want to reconsider that?

Great!!!

How do you want to talk? Have them reply back to the email? DM you? This last line needs a little clearer CTA: . If you’re ready to work with a consultant who will create your custom technology evaluation and write your recipe to streamline your systems for efficiency, let’s talk.

I like this story a lot! It is a bit long and it made wonder where it was going, but then we got there.

Hey Carrie! One thing I’m curious about is the nature of the decisions she was making that contibuted to her stress? Is it possible to capture how you help impact decisioning making?