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SUBJECT: LEAD CONVERSION TOOL
Hi folks!
I’m struggling with my Title and Subtitle for my Lead Conversion Tool for my Level 5 client and I’d love some feedback.
Level 5 client:
* women healthcare professionals
* verging on burnout
* despite doing a”all the things” to stay healthy and happy
* they know something needs to change but they’re…Read More![Profile Photo]()
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@sarasarafins-com Thank you. Shannon said the same thing. 😊 I struggle with naming things… always better to dialogue with others.
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Reverse your path to Burnout: Get clarity on your ONE next step to reclaim yourself.
i like the title because it reminds me of what could happen…but I agree with sara about the word reclaim. how about changing it to protect?
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How my life experience uniquely positions me
Send To: Full List
Subject Line: How Autism Taught Me to Serve You Better (85% on Monster Insights)
Preview Text: Lessons learned from my autism parenting journeyNormal is a setting on my dishwasher; Autism is not.
My daughter was 2 years old when we got the diagnosis of Autism. At that…Read More
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Your passion and deterination to figure out how to help your daughter definitely translates into your passion for helping your clients, and your interest in getting to know them and their needs so you can best support them too. I loved these lines: I understand your frustration if your programs are all over the…Read More
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I love this – SO relatable! Great job on the content and drawing the parallels. Well done. I know your subject line scored high, but it’s best to have 3-5 words max in subject and preview lines. Might want to reconsider that?
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Great!!!
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I tried to follow the email trust triad with this one. I appreciate any and all feedback!
Differentiator:
The SPARK Assessment is tailored to each business owner and goes deep to ensure their tech ecosystem aligns with their business goals. We meet the business owner where they are and leave the cookie cutters in the kitchen…Read More3 Comments-
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How do you want to talk? Have them reply back to the email? DM you? This last line needs a little clearer CTA: . If you’re ready to work with a consultant who will create your custom technology evaluation and write your recipe to streamline your systems for efficiency, let’s talk.
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Gotcha. Thanks! I updated the last paragraph to this:
I want them to experience that ooey, gooey, yummy cookie that was made just for them. If you’re ready to work with a consultant who will create your custom technology evaluation and write your recipe to streamline your systems for efficiency, let’s talk. Schedule your coffee and cookie cha…Read More
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I like this story a lot! It is a bit long and it made wonder where it was going, but then we got there.
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Updated my Mission, Vision & Purpose (using the module in CPC). Would love your feedback! Thank you!
PURPOSE: Universal truth: WHY am I in business?
**Women empowered to live fully, true to themselves, create potent impact in their families, communities, business and the world.
VISION: the HOW, public facing (on Home Page, in contracts,…Read More
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Hey Ann – would love to connect as I’m also on a mission to eradicate burn out – but mine is with small business owners, especially women! Hope to see you on a call – I’ve just joined the Club!
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@diana-lidstonegmail-com Love to connect with you!! And Welcome to the Club!!
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Do you want to be more specific to the women leaders you want to empower?
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@amymshannonhernandez-com I’ll chat with you about this in our call today!! Thanks for the question.
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I sent you a message on FB! Let’s chat soon
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DIRECT OFFER POST- love your feedback. Struggling with HOOKS.
Women, have you LOST your SELF?
I was on a call this morning with a nurse who REALLY wants to stop the cycles of burnout she’s been in.
She said, “I feel like I’ve lost myself”, and wept. 🥺 Oh, I felt her pain and my heart ached for her. 💔
But this isn’t an unusual e…Read More
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I wish I knew copy better to help you – let me sit with this
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![Profile picture of Ann Becks]()
Vee, I absolutely love how real you are!! 😁
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Love this, Ann!
Feels like the immediate jump to losing yourself is a little too abrupt. Perhaps move that line. Does the following work for you?. . . .
I was on a call this morning with a nurse who REALLY wants to stop the cycles of burnout she’s been in. [add a detail or two to make this person and her burnout more concrete.]She summed i…Read More
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![Profile picture of Ann Becks]()
ooo, thank you Dan! I appreciate this feedback! And thanks for the badassity link!😁
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![Profile picture of CarrieWulf]()
Ann – what if you add a testimonial from someone who has experienced a major shift?
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That’s a great idea. Thanks Carrie!
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Hi @annannbecks-co – the ‘reclaim yourself’ subtitle doesn’t resonate with me. It feels murky. I’m not sure what that means. Can you use different wording there? I like the rest of it. The title feels clear and I like that different levels of assessment will lead to different suggestions/outcomes.